The Official Writing Challenge
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This is such a sweet story, bittersweet actually. I loved the setup and could feel the weariness of the mom. It was easy to relate to her.

The only red ink I have is in the beginning you used the passive verb was quite a bit, perhaps if you subbed some active verbs it would help with the show vs tell concept.

You did a great job of shoeing the power of prayer. And a little one shall lead us. You did a marvelous job of building a beautiful story around the topic.
Ahhhh.... I loved the little boy's prayer. Beautiful story.
Very moving, very well written. I felt so sorry for Richie, who seemed to know more of what was going on than his mother probably did. It's great to see the way his prayers were answered at the end.