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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Achoo (04/11/13)

TITLE: Tickles my Tonsils
By Yvonne Blake
04/15/13


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Oh great!
Here it comes
Deep
In the back of my throat,
The tiny prickle
That wiggles
And wriggles
And tickles
My tonsils.


Sip a drink
Of something pink.


Oh no!
Higher climbs
Up
In the depths of my nose,
Some tiny itch
That rushes
And brushes
And twitches
My nostrils.

Give a snuff . . .
Itís not enough.

Oh my!
Hold it tight,
Far
At the edge of my eyes,
The tiny lashes,
That wink
And blink
And splash
My glasses.

Squeeze tight,
All your might.

Oh dear!
Once it starts
Pounds
In the drums of my ears
The tiny sneeze
That fizzles
And twizzles
And wheezes
My cochleas.

Stop that squirm,
You lousy germ!

Oh rats!
An explosion will
Come
In the strength of its might
A growing blast
With . . . eek
And . . . ooh
And . . . ah
. . .
I
lost
it.






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Verna Cole Mitchell 04/18/13
Delightful throughout, and I love the ending!
Christina Banks 04/20/13
Very fun poem. Thank you.
Carolyn Ancell04/21/13
Very funny poem; and the visual layout shapes it too, as it sort of inhales and exhales!
Alicia Renkema04/23/13
Very clever -- like the way we can all "feel" that "Achoo!" at the end of your piece though you never directly state it. You quite perfectly describe the human sneeze throughout, have a nice rhyme scheme as well, and I like the way the last stanza is pictured as "the sneeze tumbling out" in a sort of water-fall form. Great job with this forceful entry (ha)!
Leola Ogle 04/24/13
As an allergy sufferer I am delighted to learn my bothersome symptoms make lovely prose. Good job. God bless!
Judith Gayle Smith04/24/13
An absolutely delightful read!
Beth LaBuff 04/25/13
Vonnie, I love your progression of thought (and of the sneeze) It was completely entertaining. The ending was PERFECT! :) I'm smiling.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/26/13
Congratulations on ranking 32 overall!