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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Repeat (01/24/13)

TITLE: Triple S
By vincent lyons
01/29/13


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A great affliction’s got me down;
From my friend I got infected
Preventatives have not been found
And no antidote’s expected.

It started out in simple ways
Through his fondness for flamboyance
It wasn’t long ‘till his malaise
Would become my pet annoyance.

He used to tell outlandish tales,
By misfortune, entertaining,
But laughter turned to mental wails
And my love of laughs was waning.

For day by day he would repeat
‘Till his stories drove me barmy
If only I could press ‘delete’!
Had to take some pills to calm me.

Though he’s the one with ‘triple s’
Seems like I alone need treatment
While he raves on with no regrets
With no sign of discontentment.

My gentle hints and reprimands
Have all failed to bring solution
I fear there’s no one understands—
Is it me that’s got delusion?

I can’t believe he’s unaware
That he’s driving me distracted
Which much increases my despair
Why my sanity’s impacted.

“What’s triple-s? What does it mean?
“This malaise I so bemoan?”
It’s a great insidious unseen,
As ‘Same Story Syndrome’ known.


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CD Swanson 01/31/13
Nicely done and nicely told. I enjoyed this completely entertaining entry.

Thank you. God bless~
Charla Diehl 01/31/13
This poem is cleverly written and brought a smile to my lips with the last stanza--just as I was wondering what the Triple S was all about.
Joe Moreland02/01/13
Ha! You made me laugh out loud! Great job!

Wait! You weren't talking about me - were you?
Sally Hanan02/01/13
This reminds me of my now departed MIL. :) An enjoyable poem, and I'd encourage you to keep doing these but to make all the syllables of each verse identical. Look up Kenn Allen's work—a FW master—and you'll see how much it helps the reader to have it structured.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/07/13
This is a clever take on the topic. It did pull me to the past when Mom would call and complain about her mom. I would joke and say oh in another 20 years, I'll be calling Emily(my daughter) and complain about you, Mom. I never dreamed Mom would have died at 57 and rob me of my chance to complain.:) It makes those little annoyances so little in the grand scheme of life.You really touched my heart with your words. Congratulations for ranking 22 (Double Two :) overall!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/07/13
I noticed Sally's comment, and as I am quite tone deaf and have a horrible time hearing the natural rhythm of lines, I will go through and count on my fingers the number of syllables. I did every line of yours and I think all but three had eight syllables in each line. The three that didn't had 7 so I'm not quite sure why that comment was made. Maybe there is more that I can't hear, but according to my fingers, it was close to perfection.:)