The Official Writing Challenge
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01/31/13
Awww, this was so touching. I loved this entire piece. Thank you. God bless~
02/01/13
This one caught me off-guard. From such an innocuous beginning, to such a serious situation certainly caused a "paradigm shift" in my thinking. My only suggestion would be to clarify your own paradigm shift comment in the story. I wasn't clear on whether you were referring to Vera's speech causing Albert to completely change his mind, or whether the paradigm shift was a role reversal of Vera taking command of the situation. It's a very subtle difference, and a nit-picky thing, but it was something I got stuck on, so I thought I'd mention it. Probably no one else even gave it a second thought, so it's most likely just me.

Overall, though, I really enjoyed this entry. Good job!
As a grandparent myself, I was right there with you, seeing the grandparents' love and commitment all the way.