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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Search Engine (10/06/11)

TITLE: Plain Crash
By Beth LaBuff
10/19/11


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Plain Crash

A zephyr swept savanna's plain.
The African sun blazed.
A crash* of rhino's searched for food,
Their grassland overgrazed.

A league of scholars heard their plight
And since it's common knowledge
That "Information holds the key,"
They rallied at their college.

They formed, to raise awareness,
The Rhino-Smarts Foundation.
They gathered funds for laptops--
Tax deductible donations.

The rhino boasts keen hearing,
Though poor eyesight overall.
It's also common knowledge that
His brain is somewhat small.

An herbivore with thick gray skin,
Each foot displays three toes.
He's none too bright, quite comical
With horn atop his nose.

The Rhino-Smarts Foundation
Presented to the crash,
A laptop for their personal use,
With giga-memory cache.

The rhinos, grateful for the gift,
Began appropriation.
They plotted ways to ascertain
Some prudent information.

With keywords, "vitamins" and "grass,"
Each word spelled with precision.
They searched which grass variety
Would boost their feeble vision.

They googled which would strengthen
The horn atop their nose
And which would banish athlete's foot
Between their triple toes.

They also searched for recipes
To turn the grass to mash
That promised thick-skin softening—
Grass lotion for the crash.

Just as they sought to google
Specific grass locations –
Their laptop flashed a message,
Caused arrhythmic palpitations.

"Warning! Virus Warning!"
Spread confusion like a flash.
Poor vision, plus their pint-sized brains—
A virus struck their crash ? ! ?

They googled, "virus symptoms."
They yahooed, "rhino pain."
Resultant—"rhinovirus"
Confused their rhino brains.

It started with a sniffle, then
Progressed to horn congestion
"The virus" rampaged through the crash—
The powers of suggestion.

While virus through the laptop spread
To giga-memory cache,
The monitor went haywire then
Their laptop system crashed.

Sometimes a little knowledge
Can misdirect the brain.
The ailing, fevered rhinos crashed
And burned upon the plain.
***

*crash—a herd of rhinoceroses



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CD Swanson 10/21/11
This entry provided a lot of information, and there were clever messages and references throughout. I needed to read it two times to get the full meaning.

Nice job. God Bless~
Linda Goergen10/21/11
I read this twice and I still couldn’t figure out in my mind if (1) real rhinos crashed and burned or (2) if it was virtual computer rhinos, or (3) if it was the “rhino” members of the the Rhino-Smarts Foundation! Of course I would have different emotions with the different scenarios. So I honestly didn’t know whether to laugh or cry! LOL This is an amazing poem, and it irks me that I can’t grasp its rightful vision! I will have to check back and see what others say.
Mona Purvis10/22/11
This is just hilarious! The writing is as good as it gets. How did you think this one up? Love, love, love it!

Mona
Catherine Maher10/22/11
Soooo fun to read! I luved it. First the rhinos, then the people, then the computers all had the flu. Delightful read, right on topic and then some.
Linda Goergen10/22/11
Okay, I do see it now! When I read it with my fantasy-fairytale eyes and not my serious eyes! LOL The Rhino’s were given a laptop by the foundation and they were having fun with the searches until they came upon rhinovirus and then the power of suggestion had them believing what was not true, but they convinced themselves “burned” with fever and the “crash” heard, simply meaning the herd of rhinos, plopped down upon the plain! So clever and humorous!

But then, you know besides the humor, my serious eyes took note again and I now see a serious message in it too! The rhinos were kind of like an analogy of mankind, given a little knowledge, without Godly guidance, that knowledge can become disastrous! The rhino’s didn’t seek understanding of what they read from ones who would know; they leaned to their own “tiny understanding and so suffered in their misunderstanding! Just like mankind, when he seeks to lean on his own understanding and not God’s truth!

This poem was an awesome masterpiece of brilliant thought and meaning and I missed the absolute genius crafting of this poem first read around and I apologize! Kudos on your artistry!!

Virgil Youngblood 10/22/11
What a delightful, fun read. Well done.
Laury Hubrich 10/23/11
This was hilarious. At first I thought people would be helping the rhinos but I caught on quick. Too funny but we are just as bad. Powers of suggestion indeed. Fun stuff.
Lori Othouse 10/23/11
This was great! So fun, great rhythm, I couldn't wait to find out what happened to them. And a good message for us non-rhinos as well...how much we are the same way!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/26/11
This is a comical delight. You painted a delightful picture for my tired brain. I enjoyed the word play too. The only suggestion would be you might have used the word crash too many times. I counted 8-9 Crashes in this short delightful poem.
Melanie Kerr 10/30/11
Top notch poetry. Superb - every word was carefully chosen. I loved the last verse.
Verna Cole Mitchell 11/03/11
Cngratualations on a well deserved EC for this delightful poem! (twin!)
Margaret Kearley 11/04/11
I love this Beth, just fantastic with some wonderful rhymes! I have to admit my ignorance - I didn't know a 'crash' was a herd of rhino! but your use of double meanings, eg 'crash' and 'rhinovirus' was just inspirational! Love the humour of this poem! I think my favourite verse was 'Just as they sought to google
Specific grass locations –
Their laptop flashed a message,
Caused arrhythmic palpitations.' Great! Congratulations on well deserved EC.

Sydney Avey11/04/11
This is very fun. Excellent title that set us up for a romp with the rhinos, poor babies! Good message about how confusing a glut of information can be.
Noel Mitaxa 11/07/11
Beth, you are a brilliant poet; for your precision and humour wrapping itself so cleverly around a solid message. Loved the pun in your title - extremely veld done!;-)
Dianne Janak11/15/11
Beth, I just had to check the Editor's choices as I have been absent for awhile and was SOO pleased to see your pieces are still ranking in the well deserved top ten for you and for all of us. God's gift in you and through you leaves me in awe of Him and His love for us.