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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Blowout (04/28/11)

TITLE: This is the Father
By Beth LaBuff
05/03/11


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This is the Father
--with a nod to Mother Goose--
***

This is the father who hid his dismay.

This is the son who sought riches one day
From the father who hid his dismay.

This is the land in a realm faraway
Where the son squandered all of the riches one day,
Bestowed from the father who hid his dismay.

This is the famine that caused crop decay,
Then the son looked around, but his friends ran away
'Cause he'd squandered his wealth in a realm faraway,
Bestowed from the father who hid his dismay.

These are the swine with their coats dapple-gray
That dined with the son at their porcine buffet
Because of the famine that caused crop decay,
While the son looked around, but his friends ran away
'Cause he'd squandered his wealth in a realm faraway,
Bestowed from the father who hid his dismay.

This is the son who realized one day
That his Father had servants with food and more pay
Than he made feeding swine with their coats dapple-gray
While he starved dining out at their porcine buffet,
Because of the famine that caused crop decay,
While the son looked around, but his friends ran away
'Cause he'd squandered his wealth in a realm faraway,
Bestowed from the father who hid his dismay.

This is the son, who in rags was arrayed,
That was seen by the father who ran straightaway
To his son who in sorrow had realized one day
That his Father had servants with food and more pay
Than he made feeding swine with their coats dapple-gray
While he starved dining out at their porcine buffet,
Because of the famine that caused crop decay,
While the son looked around, but his friends ran away
'Cause he'd squandered his wealth in a realm faraway,
Bestowed from the father who hid his dismay.

This is the calf that was fattened on hay,
Then prepared and was served at their evening soirée
And the son now in decorative robes was arrayed
When 'twas seen by the father who ran straightaway
To his son who in sorrow had realized one day
That his Father had servants with food and more pay
Than he made feeding swine with their coats dapple-gray
While he starved dining out at their porcine buffet,
Because of the famine that caused crop decay,
While the son looked around, but his friends ran away
'Cause he'd squandered his wealth in a realm faraway,
Bestowed from the father who hid his dismay.

This is the older son, claiming foul play
For he'd never left home and had not disobeyed,
When he saw that the calf that was fattened on hay
Was prepared for the young brother's evening soirée
And his brother in decorative robes was arrayed
When 'twas seen by the father who ran straightaway
To his brother, that sadly had realized one day
That his Father had servants with food and more pay
Than he made feeding swine with their coats dapple-gray
While he starved dining out at their porcine buffet,
Because of the famine that caused crop decay,
While his brother looked 'round, but his friends ran away
'Cause he'd squandered his wealth in a realm faraway,
Bestowed from the father who hid his dismay.

This is the father, who answered this way,
"Oh my son, my belongings are all yours today,"
When he'd griped to the father and shouted, "foul play."
For he'd never left home and had not disobeyed.
When he saw that the calf that was fattened on hay
Was prepared for his young brother's evening soirée
And his brother in decorative robes was arrayed
When 'twas seen by the father who ran straightaway
To his brother, that sadly had realized one day
That his Father had servants with food and more pay
Than he made feeding swine with their coats dapple-gray
While he starved dining out at their porcine buffet,
Because of the famine that caused crop decay,
While the son looked around, but his friends ran away
'Cause he'd squandered his wealth in a realm faraway,
Bestowed from the father who hid his dismay.

This is the father, his tears wiped away,
For his son is now found, who had once gone astray.
They feasted with friends, all the foods were gourmet
At that joyful reunion, a grand holiday!
And the father who once was dismayed yelled, "Hooray!"
***
based on
Luke 15:11-32



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Laury Hubrich 05/06/11
Wow! Awesome way to tell this story. Very original:)
Loren T. Lowery05/10/11
Hooray indeed! This so reminds me of the ballad of Pecos Bill. I loved the way it built upon itself, gaining weight - as it were - to the climax. This is a wonderful way to re-tell such an important Biblical parable in that it will reach a new audience.
Michael Throne05/10/11
Well done! This was a joy to read from beginning to end.
Lillian Rhoades 05/10/11
Will I ever?...Perhaps someday I'll reach the level of originality this poem displays. Loved the rhyme, rhythmn and repetitious refrain. Extra points for the title!
Amanda Brogan05/10/11
Sheer genius! Masterful poetry as usual. :)
Virgil Youngblood 05/10/11
What can I say, no ... I must shout, OLE!
Edmond Ng 05/11/11
This is an interesting approach capturing the story of the prodigal son in an illustrative display. Excellent work!
Amanda Brogan05/12/11
Marvelous win! Congrats!
Margaret Kearley 05/12/11
Beth, this is wonderful and a very well deserved win. I've been mulling on writing a 'This is the house that Jack built' poem recently but I would never have thought of using this Biblical account, and would never have had your wonderful word choices and rhymes. Fantastic.
Carol Penhorwood 05/12/11
Sensational! I just stand in constant awe of your talent. Amazingly creative and absolutely deserving of this award.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/12/11
This is the woman who has no dismay for marveling at talents you always display!

I love this! Congratulations!
Ann Grover05/12/11
Brilliant! What else is there to say that hasn't already? Congratulations!
Yvonne Blake 05/13/11
Wow! This is great...and well deserved the EC! Congratulations, Bethy
Bonnie Bowden05/13/11
I think you should have this illustrated and made into a children's book.

Brillant job! Congratulations on a much deserved EC award.
Sharon Eastman05/14/11
This is masterful! I like to write poetry, but this is awesome work. I agree with Bonnie. It should be formatted into a child's book.
Linda Hayes05/17/11
Wonderful and clever. Great way to retell an ancient story of Father's love.
Nancy Bucca06/02/11
Amazing work. This inspires me. Congratulations!
Janice Fitzpatrick06/20/11
Great job. I was trying my hand at this using the The House That JackBuilt technique and had it a little differently. This is well done!! I love reading your pieces.You have a gift for creativity and often humorous expression in many of your entries. Love it all!:)