The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked the descriptions and the place/time of this story.

There is a lot of action in this piece and it seemed hard for me to follow. Perhaps the flashbacks could be in italics or seperated with a line?

I liked that the French words were still understandable to a non-French speaker!
Lots was packed into a short piece. I feel breathless now!
This is really poetic prose at its best - you have great talent.
This is the way I most enjoy history--in wonderful stories. You put me in the midst of the terrible situation. Well done.
Great opening, super suspense, artistic imagery. A great line: "My anger guttered and died like a candle flam." The ending was powerful, I just wished I had more back story to fill in what I'm unfamiliar with during this time. But very masterfully written. A tough piece in 750 words. You have awesome skill. God bless.