The Official Writing Challenge
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08/12/10
You have teased out a very believable account of Moses' mother's feelings as she feeds her child. You maintain tension as she tries not to let slip who the real mother is.
Ohhhh, well done. I love historical fiction and this one was told masterfully. The ending may have been a tiny bit weak, but I hope this one places in the EC.
08/13/10
This was written so realistically as you described the tense and emotional moments Moses' birth mother had to endure. Her feelings were felt by me. Good work.
08/16/10
I really loved the way you brought the emotions out and made us feel what Moses' mother was feeling.
This is done expertly. I could feel the roughness of the material and the ache of the heart.
08/16/10
Oh yes, very well written. Excellent atmosphere, character description, dialog. I was right there sharing Moses's mom's pain and pleasure. I had to say "mom" because it seemed such a tender relationship between mom and babe. You nailed this.
I love the view of what very truly "may have been." Excellent storytelling, bringing out the longing of Jochabed's heart.
08/17/10
Loved both the emotional and physical ambiance of this as it unfolded into what felt more like a movie than a written account.
Good job, Rachel. Descriptions were very realistic, nice showing, and emotions.
08/18/10
How right they both were! I loved the contrast here between the two women and how they are connected in such an amazing way.

Incredible writing as always!
08/19/10
You really brought these women to life for me. Excellent job! Congratulations on your EC!!
08/19/10
Oooh, nice! I like the contrasting personalities and how it must have felt for his mother to watch another woman singing of different gods and cuddling HER baby when he cried. Good job--and congrats! ^_^
Oh good, I'm glad this one placed! Congrats, Rachel!
08/19/10
History through Rachel Phelp's eyes...always a treat. Congrats on the EC.
08/20/10
Beautifully written Rachael. Congratulations.
08/26/10
WONDERFUL!

I LOVED this. A truly nurturing, satisfying read and a marvellous take on the topic.

Well done, my friend.