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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: The Editor (05/27/10)

TITLE: Monologue of the Merciless Editor
By Verna Cole Mitchell
05/28/10


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“Oh me, oh my!” said the editor.
“Correcting this is quite the chore.

Is this the best that you can muster?
This story’s totally lackluster.

The writing is so uninspired;
Just reading through it makes me tired.

It’s my job to inform you that
Your characters are cardboard-flat.

Their dialogue is somewhat static,
Their interaction, problematic.

And can’t you tell this phrase is wrong?
It’s hackneyed as a country song.

The verbs you’ve used are lacking action;
Your adjectives are pure distraction.

Descriptions here are not poetic;
I’d say that they’re downright pathetic.

Your plot line wanders round and round.
No resolution can be found.

Your thoughts are not original.
I see no spark of life at all.

I’m trying here to be polite,
But I insist that you rewrite.

In fact, I have a better plan:
Throw this away—begin again.”
. . . . . . . . . .

For criticism that’s dispersed,
My inner editor’s the worst.


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Elizabeth Cain06/04/10
Loved the last stanza! The words you chose, I thought, gave the poem an enjoyable rhythm. Your poem had a fun take on the topic.
I'd have to agree that my worst editor is the one inside me. It is indeed merciless! "Characters flat as cardboard. The story should just be scraped. None of the word choices made sense." When I read the end I had to smile at all the harsh critiques given because they are things my inner editor says.
A very good read!
Dusti (Bramlage) Zarse06/04/10
I completely agree. A wonderful read. All thoughout I thought, "Wow! This editor is truly HARSH!" and then I came to the last stanza and could relate. My inner editor is DEFINITELY that harsh, haha. Great, great job.
Rachel Phelps06/08/10
Did you tape my inner editor to write this? Oh wait, my inner editor doesn't speak in rhyme. :) Amazing work!
Folakemi Emem-Akpan06/08/10
Every writer has a merciless editor in him/herself and you have portrayed this so well. As is commonly said, I am my own worst critic and you obviously are too.
Almost missed this fun entry because I am not such a fan of poetry but I am glad I read this.
Linda Germain 06/09/10
Charming poem...and to the point! nicely done
Edmond Ng 06/09/10
Exceptionally nice read! This is a sad poem from a writer's viewpoint—the total rejection of one's manuscript! That's probably why as writers we tend to be our own worst critic, just in order not to face the same kind of response by an editor you've described.
Beth LaBuff 06/10/10
Verna, I LOVE your "merciless editor"... this made me smile "real big".. :) Clever and creative! Super congrats on your level placing and Editor's Choice award!!
Carol Penhorwood 06/10/10
This was a winner for sure. Loved it, Verna!
Carole Robishaw 06/10/10
Congrats Verna on a job well done.
Joan Campbell06/10/10
Congratulations Verna! This was a great read and the clever last stanza made it even greater. Really enjoyed it!