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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Hmph! (03/04/10)

TITLE: Hmph...Such Inconsiderate People
By Verna Cole Mitchell
03/05/10


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It looks like weíll be late for Sunday School.
I wish, like me, all kept the Golden Rule.
The drivers up ahead are much too slow,
And if I get the chance, Iíll tell them so.

Itís awful hard to find a parking place.
When members don't have one, that's a disgrace.
I bet there are a bunch of visitors.
Our church lets anyone come through its doors.

The lesson for today is truly boring;
Iíd sleep if I were not afraid of snoring.
The teacherís droning on and on and on;
Itís hard for me to stifle every yawn.

And now in church thereís someone in our spot,
Not caring if we get a seat or not.
Weíll have to find one somewhere else, I guess,
Just one more thing to put me under stress.

Oh no! Here comes another worship song;
The music of todayís completely wrong.
When I was young, we sang with dignity.
With drums, thatís not a possibility.

The preacherís sermonís going way too late.
For lunch weíll have to stand in line and wait.
Itís not like me to be the one to fuss,
But unchurched people get in front of us.

Itís sad that many folks are not like me,
For I can say with deep humility:
Whatever should turn out to be my lot,
Iíve learned the way to be contentÖor not.


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Beth LaBuff 03/11/10
This reminds me of the publican and the sinner... You made me think! I like your end line...
Jackie Wilson03/12/10
Quite a lesson here, and a good reminder to us all, made even more palatable by a dash of humor!
Barbara Lynn Culler03/12/10
All too true! Good read-kept my interest to the end.
AnneRene' Capp 03/15/10
Self-righteous chiding. Loved it! A good reminder to us all. Also enjoyed thinking about how "too close for comfort" this felt for many of us. :)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/15/10
This poem just flows. I'd love to be able to write poetry as smoothly as you do. I smiled at the tongue-in-cheek comments. What a great way to prove your point.
Lyn Churchyard03/15/10
I think she used to go to my church years ago. Hmph! I could even see your MC. Well done, Verna, very well done indeed.
Marita Vandertogt03/15/10
Oops - I'm a little too familiar with a lot of these lines - this was a little guilt provoking but in a good way.
william price03/15/10
Very good. You keep proving time and time again you're one of my favorites. I have felt some of the same things. Great job. God bless.
Sarah Elisabeth 03/16/10
Wow, great take! Loved the flow of this, awesome!
Charla Diehl 03/17/10
Think the MC needs to get the plank out of her eye--that's the Bible passage I thought of while reading this fun entry.
Ruth Stromquist03/17/10
Really well done! Enjoyed it much.
Mona Purvis03/18/10
A mind-reader as well...not just an excellent writer. The tone of this is perfect for the topic.
Classic.

Mona