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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Ohhh…. (02/04/10)

TITLE: Ohhh...It Hurts Just Thinking about It
By Verna Cole Mitchell
02/07/10


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I can’t believe I ate all that—
Just filled with calories and fat.

With onion rings did I begin
And spicy sauce to dip them in.

My fresh green salad, I’m confessing,
Had croutons crowned with blue cheese dressing.

Of chicken soup, I had a bowl,
As well as soft white dinner roll.

With pork ribs, honey barbecued,
Were apples with brown sugar stewed.

The French fries were a crisp delight,
Their cheddar topping, “outta sight.”

I ate no green beans, corn, or peas,
Sans salt, sans seasoning, sans cheese.

But there were vegetables sautéed
In cream and butter, I’m afraid.

Dessert time I just had to try
Both cheesecake and some pecan pie.

I topped it all with almond coffee
And caramel and chocolate toffee.

Ohhh, how I had a stomach ache…
Till suddenly did I awake.

I’d dreamed my dinner, rich foods packed,
My diet started, still intact.


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Bryan Ridenour02/11/10
Really fun poem and I wish I hadn't read it...it's too close to lunch time :)
Lisa Johnson 02/11/10
Too close to bedtime! Cute poem!
Kellie Henningsen02/11/10
Fun! What a relief for the MC -- to know the diet was still intact! The food sounded scrumptious!
Noel Mitaxa 02/12/10
Is this a case of "food for thought" - or "thought for food?" Good fun stuff.
Beth LaBuff 02/16/10
I loved your surprise at the end. :) This is perfectly written (meter, rhyme, and thought). ...plus it made me hungry! :)
Mona Purvis02/17/10
I've dreamed about food while on a diet, so i really identified with this wonderful piece. And Southern cooking sounds like my kind of feast.
A+ all the way.

Mona
Chely Roach02/17/10
Delicious words and rhyme. Loved the ending. :)
Marita Vandertogt02/17/10
I'm getting ready to go to a potluck at lunch...good timing.
Visions of your poem will run through my head!!
But stick to my diet, I must instead.
You make everything sound absolutely delicious.. nice rhyme and a fun easy read.
Loren T. Lowery02/17/10
Oh, to have such dreams and to know that is only what it was - a dream : ) Unfortunately, at times at least, the first stanza are more the reality for me. Loved the way you put this into words.
Kristi Peifer02/17/10
Cute piece! I do believe I'll be trying to eat light today...!
Amanda Brogan02/17/10
Perfect title. :) I would never be able to eat all that! The ending was a wonderful relief. Nicely-written poem. Were you hungry when you wrote it? ;)
Amanda Brogan02/17/10
By the way, the almond coffee (mmmmmm!) is my favorite part! Makes me want to go brew a pot!
Catrina Bradley 02/17/10
What fun! I love the ending to this "dieter's nightmare". But now I'm hungry. :)
Sarah Elisabeth 02/17/10
Funny! Loved all the food descriptions, oh that would make me sick! Glad it was just a dream ;-)