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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Winter (the season) (08/13/09)

TITLE: Tick-a, Tock-a
By Yvonne Blake
08/18/09


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Tick-a, tock-a, tick-a, tock-a
Hurry, hurry, rush!
Picking, storing, shearing, canning,
Everyone must help.

Back shed full of chopped, stacked firewood,
Turkey's grain-fed fat,
Watching weather, working faster,
Harvest finished—done!

Cattle settled, winter’s coming,
Haystacks, milk cans, oats,
Feeding chickens, locking stables,
All is safely down.

Sagging skies are dimming quickly,
Twilight blacks and grays,
Stinging snowflakes, freezing breezes,
Kitchen windows call.

Wafts of freshly baken pastries,
Taunts the tired soul.
Stomping, thawing, tingling, burning,
Fingers, ears, and toes.

Hand in hand and heads bowed humbly,
Gratefully we pray.
Knowing all things from Almighty
We must thankful be.

Windows rattle ‘gainst the blasting,
Dark and fierce the night.
Sweeping branches, swinging fences
Thump-a, bump-a, crash!

Stoking full the Empire woodstove,
Kicking off my boots,
Satisfying feeling—comfort,
Rubbing Buddy’s ears

Sweetheart humming while she stitches
“Sweet, sweet by and by”
Singing, sewing, smiling, serving,
Comfort of my life.

Fire flits on wooden timbers,
Coffee perking strong
Hissing, crackling, flickering, whistling,
Greatest place called home.

Time to rest my weary body,
Drift on winter’s song.
Dozing, listening, dreaming, snoring,
Tick-a, tock-a, tick.


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Loren T. Lowery08/20/09
I could feel the rush and race against the clock and the things you've pointed out, needing to be done, convicted me to get started on my own chores yet waiting : )
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/20/09
Your descriptions were so well done that I was swept up into your country winter scene, and the images stayed in my mind. The rhythm throughout was exactly that of the ticking clock. I like how you began with the clock sound and ended with it in reverse. Great job.
Dee Yoder 08/20/09
Delightful! I love the rhythm and the rhyme in this poem. It is so evocative of a winter scene and cozy house.
Janice Fitzpatrick08/20/09
I love poetry and this is well done! Can I come to your little country home in the briskness of winter and thaw my frozen toes by the fire.? great descriptions and flow, meter and rhythm was right on.
Charla Diehl 08/21/09
I agree that the rhythm of the clock is present in this poem from start to finish. Certainly depicts life on a farm as one prepares for the season. Thumbs up to you.
Deborah Ann Belka08/21/09
Wonderful a - wonderful a - wonderful poem. I just loved this and the whole thought process. Great Job and I think this should is a winner a - winner a - winner!
Yvonne Blake 08/22/09
*smile*
Thanks for the rhythic comment, Deborah!
Lynda Schultz 08/23/09
This is really neat—so comforting.
Mona Purvis08/23/09
My you covered a lot of ground in this most delighful piece. It is delicious!
Mona
Jan Ackerson 08/24/09
Wonderful, Vonnie! I found so many "tricks" in here...love the onomatopoeia and the alliteration, and the way the rhythm drives the mood. Top notch!
Tallylah Monroe08/24/09
I thought the format lent itself more to a rhyming poem so I was thrown off by the lack of rhyme. I would have enjoyed it more as a rhyming poem.
Colin Swann08/24/09
ever-day-life in descriptive rhythmic expression. Thank you for showing us how it's done.
Beth LaBuff 08/24/09
I liked the "Turkey's grain-fed fat" Love the warmness and slower pace of winter described here, especially how it relates to the title. This is so cleverly written!
Ada Nett08/24/09
It flowed so well that I thought it did rhyme...I had to go back and read a second time to realize it didn't!
Bryan Ridenour08/25/09
So cleverly done. I felt the rhythm of the clock all the way through. Well written!