The Official Writing Challenge
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07/24/09
Vivid writing. I could picture the scene as it unfolded. The subtle touches of differences in class (and maybe even race) were woven in nicely.
07/26/09
Well this did NOT go where I expected it to! A strong girl here who knew what was best for her. Lord give us more like her.
Very well written. I wish all teenage girls had a desire for their boyfriends to have a relationship with God. Good storytelling. Well done!
When I first started reading this I was expecting to see a spunky, defiant girl swept away by the ne're-do-well biker, but instead a found two good hearts that bent the story in a very unexpected, but very good way.
In that it held my interest throughout, says to me that it was written well.
07/27/09
I liked this! A real sincere tne and voice. Great job! I'm glad you let on there was a glimmer of hope for Maxey.
God bless.
When I read your story, I was reminded how often good girls are attracted to "bad" boys.You made it clear that this girl would hold true to her principles, even though she hoped Maxie would change. You drew me in so tightly that I hoped he would, too. Good writing.
07/29/09
Great job of making these characters come alive! I like the hopeful ending, and the hint that Maxey might come around, after all.
07/29/09
Love the title, so poetic. The characters in the story were very real, with the dialogue hinting and drawing a picture for the reader. I especially liked the cigarette descriptions, just gave it some colour you know. Nice. Good ending too, not at all as I expected.
07/29/09
Good clean writing, telling an interesting story from an interesting POV. Holds the reader. Gets the message in without trying. Love it.
Mona
07/29/09
Ahh, young love, but what a way to handle it. "I'll pray for you, Maxey." That's simply priceless, I loved that line, great characters, great ending, loved it!
07/30/09
This story had an unexpected twist to it, but felt very real. I can't add any more than what others have said. Well done!
Betty, I think you said that this was a new approach to your writing...it looks like it paid off. Wonderful and congratulations on your EC Placement.
You hit a homerun with this one, Betty. A real winner, for sure! I want to see you in the BOB listing next summer, ya hear??? Big time kudos, my friend!!!
Wonderful writing my friend. You did a fantastic job of keeping my interest throughout the entire piece. Well done Betty!
07/30/09
I was right there in the middle of this. Realistic and well written. Congrats on your EC.
07/30/09
Masterful writing. The scene and the characters jump off the page. I like that the story didn't end in any of the expected ways. Congrats - you deserve your EC. :)
08/03/09
You did such a great job on developing these characters in a short story format. This story had so much heart and feeling to it. What wonderful interpretation...a teenage girl praying for the boy she likes to know Jesus. Just beautiful. Congrats on your Editor's Choice win, it is well deserved!