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Fantastic story! The anticipation builds with each turn of the plot and ends with an encouraging word that is needed in times such as these!
05/28/09
I especially loved that last thought—just as He promised, He was up there at her side, ready to go with her. Well done.
06/03/09
Excellent atmoshere and mood in this compelling allegory!
06/03/09
I love, love the beginning, it reads like a Ted Dekker or Frank Peretti book, being chased by the darkness, but finding truth in the light!

06/03/09
Incredibly vivid descriptions, and such a compelling story. This is absolutely MASTERFUL, Cat! Wow.
Yikes! Had me hanging onto my seat. Great scenery and I loved the way you wrapped it all up.
06/03/09
This was so rich with imagery and emotion. Loved it. Perfect last lines.
06/03/09
Very vivid descriptions and powerful imagery! It reminds us of how significant even our small decisions are in the grander scheme. Very well done!
06/03/09
Masterful, and rich, meaningful writing. Thanks for your example. Colin
06/03/09
Riveting and emotional all the way through the story. The last line was powerful and was a perfect ending. One of my favorites this week.
Wonderful reminder to be careful of our choices in life.

This is very well written. Thumbs up!
Oooohhh the imagery, the dialogue; I loved it all!

Just one question though. In the first paragraph, did you mean to say her arms scrambled or scrabbled? Just curious...:)
06/03/09
I love allegories, and this one has an excellent message! Loved the ending! :) You wrote very descriptively all the way through!
06/03/09
OOOOhhh! This is my favoritest one of yours yet!! ^_^ Loved it, especially the interaction between the two as the conversation continued and the true significance of light and dark was proven. Wowz! ^_^
Wow! Loved this from start to finish. I was right there with your MC.
06/03/09
I was carried along in the darkness with the MC and could feel the icy cold doorknob. Dramatic. I wanted her to choose the right door so much.
Mona