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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Europe (excluding the United Kingdom) (02/19/09)

TITLE: Grande Elégance
By Yvonne Blake
02/24/09


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Pièrre and Adèlle
Strolled the river's edge
As often lovers do.

She batted her eyes;
He stammered and choked,
And scuffed the dirt with his shoe.

“Regardez la!”
He cried, “I found a coin,
It's gold, glittery and new!”

His heart beat fast;
His eyes gleamed bright,
To think of what he'd do.

“When I'm a man,
I will buy you a ring,
And a feathery grand chapeau.”

Adèlle's eyes twinkled,
“A carriage, s'il vous plait,
Painted silver, with cushions of bleu?”

“Mais, oui!” he exclaimed,
“Whatever you wish,
For this is luck, 'tis true.”

“I wish for a maid
To braid up my hair
And to fetch my satin shoes.”

“Ah, oui! C'est bon!
And I, a gentleman,
With a chauffeur, perhaps two.”

“We will need a chef,
For pastries and breads,
And chicken Cordon bleu.”

“Our house will be
Très magnifique,
A marvelous chateau!”

So on they dreamed
As they strolled along,
As lovers often do.

Upon the footbridge
They paused at the rail
To watch the water's flow.

“Pièrre, may I see
The gold coin again,
To hold for a moment, too?”

He reached for the coin
In his pantalons,
But a hole had let it through.

So to the dreams
Of grande elégance,
The lovers said, “Adieu.”


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Shirley McClay 02/26/09
I am not a poetry person but this was so well written that it carried me along with it from the first word to the last! Nicely done!
Joanne Sher 02/27/09
Cute and fun. A delightful piece! Loved the daydreaming and the surprise at the end!
Mona Purvis02/27/09
What fun! Very interesting, lovely story. We can all dream..
Mona
Gerald Shuler 03/02/09
Wonderful, wonderful! You captured so much of the romance of youth. I was especially thrilled that all those lover's dreams for their future were canceled by a hole in the pocket! Ah, poverty, I know thee well.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/02/09
I loved this excellent poem with lovers' dreams and the unexpected ending. Great job!
Dee Yoder 03/02/09
Lovely and so fun to read! It has a very French feel.
Jan Ackerson 03/02/09
Absolutely adorable in every way!
Connie Dixon03/02/09
This was magnificent! Great timing, wonderful story. I love the way you've woven the French in with the English. Very well written.
Joshua Janoski03/02/09
What a clever and fun poem! I am not good at judging poetry, but I must say that a fun and lighthearted poem like this is my favorite kind. Thank you for putting a smile on my face with this. :)
Carol Slider 03/03/09
What a charming and lovely poem! Very well done.
Norma-Anne Hough 03/04/09
Lovely feel to this delightful poem. Sad ending but realistic!
Diana Dart 03/04/09
Tres bien - great fun to read!
Bryan Ridenour03/04/09
Entertaining read! Well done!
Chely Roach03/04/09
This was wonderful...I loved it!
Gerald Shuler 03/04/09
I agree with what Jan said and would add that you did a remarkable job of short lined poetry. That's hard to do and you did it perfectly.
Marita Thelander 03/04/09
Aw, so sweet, Vonnie. I enjoyed the easy pace and sweet romance packaged perfectly in the simple dreams of youth.
Sara Harricharan 03/04/09
Awww! Simply delightful! I loved reading about these too, and I especially liked the "C'est Bon" reminds me of Agatha Christie's Hercule Poirot. Great stuff! ^_^
Karlene Jacobsen 03/04/09
Awww! A hole in his pocket and the dreams slipped away. How sad.
This was a neat poem. I enjoyed it.
Lyn Churchyard03/04/09
Wonderful; a story in verse. Smooth and flowing... loved it!
Sheri Gordon03/05/09
Congratulations on your EC. Very cute read.
Beth LaBuff 03/05/09
Vonnie... I LOVE this!! (I'm so proud of you!) I could just hear the French accent in this. Congrats girl!!!
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/05/09
Congratulation, Friend. I loved your enchanting poem first time I read it and hoped it would be a winner!