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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Patience (08/21/08)

TITLE: Amanda Ant
By Verna Cole Mitchell
08/25/08


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Amanda Ant complained about
The chores that lay ahead.
They had more loads to carry since
Miranda Ant was dead

But Brandon Ant was silent as
They marched in single file.
“To gripe about the jobs we have,”
He said, “is not my style.”

And Clarence Ant was quite content
To carry dirt along.
It sometimes was amazing how
He'd break into a song.

Though Annie Ant was very young,
She did the best she could.
Some thought she’d be protesting, but
She said she never would.

Samantha Ant was meek and mild,
Long suffering and patient.
Submissively, she plodded on,
In manner most complacent

Miranda Ant was fussing still,
“This really isn’t fun.
I’m tired of trudging all day long.
I wish my work was done.

My aching back is killing me;
My legs are much too thin.
I haven’t had a break, it seems,
I can’t remember when.”

Then Nancy Ant yelled in her ear,
“The Bible calls you ‘worker,’
And that’s just what you ought to be.
Amanda, you’re a shirker.”

Cassandra Ant told both of them,
“Since patience is a virtue,
To practice it with kindness now
Would certainly not hurt you.”


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Shirley McClay 08/28/08
I know nothing about poetry but you kept me hooked all the way through. And some great lessons in there!
Chely Roach08/31/08
This was cute and fun...it made me smile. Well done.
Jan Ackerson 08/31/08
Adorable!

I especially liked the rhyme of "worker" and "shirker".
Yvonne Blake 08/31/08
I think too often we're like Amanda Ant... "Go to the ant, thou sluggard, and be wise."
Thanks for the creative reminder to be content.
Dee Yoder 08/31/08
Well, I'd like to be a patient and hard-working ant, but I think I'm more like Amanda than I'd care to admit! You captured many of the personalities of we frail humans in an original and humorous manner!
Joy Faire Stewart08/31/08
This was fun, creative, with a wonderful message. Loved it!
Betty Castleberry08/31/08
Illustrations! As usual, very well done.
Ellen Dodson08/31/08
You know how to reach adults and children (the child in me :)with your poetry. This would be wonderful fleshed out (a few more character details for each ant) and illustrated in a book for children. I appreciate the irony in it--an ANT who is impatient! Ha! One teensy detail here; unless I read it wrong, "Miranda" is used in one of the concluding stanzas when, I think, it's supposed to be "Amanda" ant.
Laury Hubrich 08/31/08
What a fun entry, as always! You certainly are NOT a shirker when it comes to providing us with great reads each week!
Patricia Turner08/31/08
A cute story told with good meter and rhyme.

I'll be thinking in meter and rhyme now for some time.

Love your little poem; a very imaginative piece.
Sharlyn Guthrie08/31/08
What a fun way to teach a lesson on patience and kindness. As always, the meter and rhyme are right on.
LaNaye Perkins08/31/08
This made me smile. I loved the ryhm, love the message too. Only thing that tripped me up was when Miranda got resurrected. lol
Well done my faithwriter friend. Well done!
Lynda Schultz 09/01/08
Great fun. I can see the pictures that go with it. The kid in all of us is happy. Well done.
Leah Nichols 09/01/08
A very pleasant poem!
Betsy Markman09/01/08
Great job with rhyme, meter, tone, message, everything!
Catrina Bradley 09/01/08
Very clever and a pleasure to read. Some great rhymes and a bouncy rhythm. You said "Miranda" one time where I think you meant Amanda - for a minute I thought they might have been in the afterlife. No biggie - I really enjoyed your poem.
Joshua Janoski09/02/08
Your poems are always so much fun. I really enjoy reading them, and this one was a unique take on this week's topic. :)
Pamela Kliewer09/02/08
This is good! Wonderful take on this topic - very creative. :)
Marlene Austin09/03/08
Love the "peace-makers" like Cassandra Ant. :) Thanks for an enjoyable read.
Lynda Lee Schab 09/03/08
Too fun! And so creative. Wonderful rhyme and meter, clever phrasing. I love it!
LauraLee Shaw09/04/08
Oh, I love this, Verna!!! Clever and entertaining, and as usual, out of the box rhyming. Superb!
Beth LaBuff 09/06/08
I love this sequel. What fun! :)