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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Charade (08/14/08)

TITLE: Serengeti Subterfuge
By Beth LaBuff
08/20/08


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In the darkness rife with night sounds,
‘Neath an umbrella tree,
Crouched young Paka* of the woodlands –
Serengeti sovereignty.

Paka Leopard was courageous
As he thrived upon the plain.
In Serengeti’s rank he neared
The apex of the food chain.

He hoped for an appearance,
Kept his respirations quiet,
Craved a meal that conformed to his
High protein – low-carb diet.

With the tardiness of dinner
And scratching of the bramble.
His thoughts began to wonder
While his brain began to scramble.

Paka had a revelation,
“My spots are so cliché,
I’ll change my spots, expunge them
To blend in among my prey!”

He borrowed spot remover
From a clean safari guest,
Who’d hoped to spot a spotted cat
While spotless on his quest.

With spots obliterated,
Spotless Paka formed a plan,
To mingle with the monkeys
And blend in among their clan.

In order to pull off this hoax
He learned some monkey antics
Like eating ripe bananas
And monkey speech semantics.

With just a smidge of exercise,
Plus a scoop of guile,
He practiced swinging from the trees
His tail — faux prehensile.

The whole charade was scrutinized
By a watchful gnu,
Who faithfully transcribed it
From his hidden gnu’s eye view.

The gnu was an informer
To the Brotherhood of Apes,
Who voiced their stern distaste on
How events had taken shape.

The monkeys weren’t bamboozled
By Paka Leopard’s cheating.
They called each head of household to a
Monkey business meeting.

The Brotherhood of Apes
Then posted union views,
Saying “Leopards can’t be monkeys
‘Cause they pay no union dues.”

And with the union’s statement
That was posted in a hurry,
No hakuna with matata
Made Paka start to worry.

To reverse a spot remover
Became his chief concern.
And all the wishful thinking
Wouldn’t make the spots return.

Accounting of this tall charade
Might be a bit askew.
We asked around before we found
Just what the old gnu knew.

It seemed that Paka Leopard
Then simmered in a stew,
Till he found a place that could replace
His spots with ink tattoos.


*Swahili for cat


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Betsy Markman08/21/08
Good, enjoyable read, and some very clever rhymes!
Lynda Schultz 08/21/08
Oh, very good. Some priceless lines.
Joanne Sher 08/22/08
Clever and delightful. This seemed to be fun to write - it certainly was to read. I could picture it all happening. Wonderful.
Kyle Chezum08/23/08
This is really good! Some of these lines are amazing.

"He borrowed spot remover
From a clean safari guest,
Who’d hoped to spot a spotted cat
While spotless on his quest."

Very creative!
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/26/08
What a fun narrative with so many great plays on words--my favorite--what the old knu knew.
Yvonne Blake 08/27/08
ha, ha, ha...LOVE IT!!! I tried to find a favorite line, but there were about 5 or 6 that I absolutely adored. This one made me laugh out loud:
"Saying “Leopards can’t be monkeys
‘Cause they pay no union dues.”
Great job. I love your poetry, Befffy!
Betty Castleberry08/27/08
Ha, ha, this was fun!
I especially liked this part:

"And with the union’s statement
That was posted in a hurry,
No hakuna with matata
Made Paka start to worry."

Kudos.
Cheri Hardaway 08/27/08
You have my greatest respect! What a poem... what a command of language... Well done! Remarkable. Cheri
LauraLee Shaw08/27/08
Un-honkin-believable. I cannot believe this came out of your head! This was my fav:
The monkeys weren’t bamboozled
By Paka Leopard’s cheating.
They called each head of household to a
Monkey business meeting.


Just perfect.
Sharlyn Guthrie08/28/08
Excellent writing, my friend! Congratulations on your 1st place EC. Way to go!!
Beverly Caviness08/28/08
Wow! Way to go Bethy. Good Job.
Congratulation on First Place EC
Joshua Janoski08/28/08
"Craved a meal that conformed to his High protein – low-carb diet."

I loved that line. Actually, I LOVED the entire thing! So good! Anyone that wants an example of clever poetry done right should read this piece. Congratulations on top honors, Beth!
Sheri Gordon08/28/08
Congratulations on your 1st place. This is so clever, so creative, so fun, so excellent. Great job with the topic. Wow.
Patricia Turner08/29/08
LOL!! Spot remover, what the old gnu knew, Paka Swahili for cat; fun and clever all the way through! Congratulations on you 1st place and 1st place EC!! This SO deserved it.
Dianne Janak09/03/08
Beth, This was SUPERB! Congrats on your EC win.. I am never surprised to see your work in the spotlight.. your gift is truly a GIFT to all of us.. keep it up girl.. you inspire me!
Henrietta W. Romman09/23/08
BETH..OH BETH...WHAT ARE YOU DOING ...BLESSING YOUR READERS SO MUCH! PRAISE GOD!

YOUR POETIC LANGUAGE FLOWS LKE A ROYAL ROBE OF PURPLE SATIN..SO...SO FLAWLESS!

I AM GREATLY BLESSED...I LOVE THIS "PAKA HAD A REVELATION, MY SPOTS ARE SO CLICHE".

THIS IS EXACTLY WHAT LIFE IS ALL ABOUT TO SOME PLOTTERS...

"LORD! THANK YOU FOR BLESSED BETH...PLEASE FILL HER MORE AND MORE...THAT THRU HER....I TOO WOULD LEARN MORE...AMEN"
Genia Gilbert07/05/09
Just read this for the first time,along with "Forgive Her Trespasses," and I am amazed at your writing! Congratulations at having two entries in the top 40 contenders for BOB.
I'm sure either could have won, except the competition is sooooo great on FW. Thanks for your wonderful poems,