The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 846 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
08/21/08
Very enjoyable and believable. I could see it all in my mind very clearly. Well done.
(The title was great...it jumped out and made this the first article I read.)
08/21/08
Considering Lee's reaction to the new Elizabeth, giving up playing ball might not be such a bad thing. Very good story.
08/21/08
The title drew me in and I was not disappointed. I could easily picture this young girl and your story made me think of gentler times. Very enjoyable read.
I really liked this story about a little girl stepping into the world of young woman-hood. You did a fine job on this one my friend.
Very well written. I love to read stories from this era and this did not disappoint. It flowed beautifully and was great!
08/22/08
Wonderful characterization of your MC especially. I love how much of a struggle it was for her, and how devoted she was to doing it for her mother's sake.
I liked your story and take on the subject. Very well-written.
08/25/08
**smile** Something tells me that Lee doesn't think of her as a little girl anymore. What we girls go through to impress the boys!
08/25/08
This was delightful. You've captured the era well. Those were the days... Blessings, Cheri
I enjoyed reading all the "rules". I'm rather glad I'm not quite so genteel. :0 We all project an image of some kind, though, don't we? Nice job.

Sharlyn
08/25/08
Hmm. Seems like Elizabeth is the only one who doesn't like her charade. Extremely well written, this reads just beautifully - fitting for the era being described.
08/26/08
Delightful story. I love the era it is set in, but the charade still goes on.
I truly enjoyed stepping back to a gentler, genteel time in your story. I felt like I knew your mc...and liked her.
08/26/08
While reading this I had to check the length of my dress, then I realized I was wearing slacks. *horrors* What would the Genteel Ladies think? I enjoyed this very much!
The smooth writing style and descriptions draws your reader into the mind of Elizabeth. Loved it!
I like your story of a young lady "coming of age" as it used to be called. I can see the long skirts and dainty mincing steps. A nicely brushstroked image of a more genteel time.
08/27/08
So I'm strolling along, engrossed in this well-written, witty tale, and then you burst me into a snort and a wheeze with this line: She was very careful to modulate her laughter, although a horse laugh threatened to erupt at any moment.

Oh my goooooodness, that was funny. This was an Extremely clever approach to the topic...a keeper for sure. ;)
08/27/08
This was precious. For a minute I thought I was reading one of Catherine Cookson's stories. The Genteel Lady thing was well spelled out in this good tale. You have a great talent. How about taking over where Catherine Cookson left off? I have read most of her books. Now she IS no more. I love tales like this...Helen