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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Telephone (07/17/08)

TITLE: The Man With the Golden Phone
By Gerald Shuler
07/23/08


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Some tales oft’ told seem to never grow old;
they speak of a truth all must learn.
So gather around, find your seat on the ground
and listen, lest you also burn.

Simon the Shyster, a lawyer in Glyster
who only the rich could afford,
would have their case built with no thought of their guilt...
the innocent Simon ignored.

His ways were uncouth and a sham to the truth
and no one could get through to him.
The church folk all prayed though it seemed a charade:
His soul was enveloped in sin.

In sad truth, it's a fact that he'd made a pact
to defend the devil in hell.
Just to drive the fact home he purchased a phone:
pure gold, with a clear ringing bell.

With a cold heart he said "If your God isn't dead
He'll call me, I'll listen to Him.
But this phone will not ring. Your heavenly king
is a fable, a folly, a whim."

The phone, at the first, was a joke he rehearsed
to make fun of the people who prayed.
He carried his phone so he could made it well known
That its cord was severed and frayed.

O'er the years Simon's wealth exceeded his health
and he laid in his deathbed alone.
The one comfort he had (of this he was glad)
by his side was his golden phone.

Through the years it remained the one thing ordained
as a symbol of Simon's heart.
He'd never received what would make him believe...
God had failed and now he'd depart.

Simon took his last breath, submitting to death
convinced there was no "great beyond".
But, oh, he was wrong and the pull was too strong;
Hell was real and Simon felt conned.

"Oh, my God!" Simon screamed, "You truly are King.
I said I'd believe if you call."
Simon lost his first case in that horrible place...
he learned truth is true after all.

But what of the phone? That most cursed, evil phone?
Nowhere was its gold to be found.
The Lord God had decreed to send that evil seed
with Simon, in hell to be bound.

So for Simon, at least, hell's most fearsome beast,
was the clear sounding golden tone
that wouldn't stop ringing, eternally stinging...
God calling on Simon's gold phone.


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Joanne Sher 07/25/08
Eerie and engaging. This definitely grabbed me and didn't let me go. Very creative.
Glynis Becker 07/26/08
Oh my! Fantastically written!
Amy Michelle Wiley 07/27/08
Ooo, I especially love the last stanza.
Hannah Hunter07/27/08
I enjoyed reading this. It's fun but really makes you think.
Chely Roach07/28/08
Now THAT'S talent. Incredible and thought provoking. Wow!
Joy Faire Stewart07/28/08
Very creative poem with an excellent message.
Betty Castleberry07/29/08
Doubters often need something tangible. Too bad he waited too long. Good work.
Catrina Bradley 07/30/08
Phenomenal!! Outstanding poetry, and a great story, too. I was glued til the end.
Mariane Holbrook07/30/08
This is a winner. I kid you not! Kudos!
Shirley McClay 07/30/08
Eesh... gave me the chills.. wow. Well done.
Helen Dowd 07/30/08
WOW! What a message! "God is NOT mocked." Simon found that out. The message is scarey. I hope any lost person reading it will heed it...As for the poem itself, I loved it. I love limericks and have tried a few myself. But this one was supberb...Helen
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/30/08
Now who wouldn't like a poem with "Simon the shyster, a lawyer in Glyster"? Amazing story told in verse.
Sara Harricharan 07/30/08
Oh my, quite a different view here on this piece! Very 'interesting' is the word that comes to mind. Thanks for sharing this! Makes me think. ^_^
Joshua Janoski07/31/08
This was great, Gerald. One of my favorites this week. The rhythm was good, and the story even better. I didn't know that you wrote poetry!

I hope this places, because I really enjoyed it a lot.
Beth LaBuff 07/31/08
Wow! Just excellent writing, rhyming, and story! This has it all! Super congrats on your level placing and EC!
Marita Thelander 07/31/08
Congrats on your EC, Jerry. I enjoyed the "feel" of this piece.
Joy Faire Stewart07/31/08
Gerald, congratulations on your very much deserved win!
Betsy Markman07/31/08
Wow, where did you get the idea for this? Remarkable. Congratulations on your EC.
Karen Wilber 07/31/08
This is creepy good. You know what's going to happen, but you can't stop reading. I like the rhythm and the way you fit the story in. Also the cruel irony that he lost his case to defend the devil. You packed quite a bit in this cautionary tale. Congrats on EC.
Patricia Turner07/31/08
Wow! A man rhyming his way to hell. It hurt to know how it would end for Simon, but this was well and cleverly told. Congratulations on your well deserved win!
Dianne Janak07/31/08
"creepy good".,..well said.. loved this dark but shattering poem about truth we hate to face in the eternity of fools.. VERY good writing... thanks Gerald... Congrats
Jason Swiney07/31/08
This had to be fun to write, it was definitely fun to read. I liked the flow and the internal rhyme throughout. You put this together well, and ended it perfectly. Congratulations, well deserved.
Sharlyn Guthrie08/01/08
Superb writing! Congratulations on your placement.