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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: The Family Reunion (06/05/08)

TITLE: Oh! You Should Have Been There
By Mariane Holbrook
06/11/08


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“We wish you could have been there!” that’s what everybody said.
‘Twas held at Enfield Glen just like before.
We had the usual games and races for the little kids
And just for once the heavens didn’t pour.

Old Uncle Happy brought some taffy for the candy hunt.
He hid them just as soon as he arrived.
By two o’clock the taffies were all covered with black ants;
The kids still ate them and somehow survived.

Aunt Bessie searched throughout the park to find her young son, George;
(They’d driven up from somewhere way down South.)
Some distant cousins cornered George, then heard Aunt Bessie scream,
“Son, take that caterpillar from your mouth!”

The boys showed George some money if he’d eat that fuzzy worm,
But George preferred his money in advance.
He ate the caterpillar and his tongue swelled twice its size
And George rode in a brand new ambulance!

The talent show this year was great with songs and dancing, too.
Jim’s juice harp solo won, ‘twas fair and square.
But Betsy soon forgot the words to “Bushel And A Peck”
And pitched a little fit in her despair.

We bought a lovely present for the oldest person there.
We thought it’d be a wonderful surprise.
But not one lady would reveal her age before us all
And who could even guess with these hair dyes?

Then something unexpected happened; we all held our breaths.
Our cousin Gerald walked upon the scene.
He used to be a drunkard, so unkempt and unemployed
But now he walked erect, looked sharp and clean.

He’d moved away out West and no one heard from him again.
I guess ‘twas twenty years ago or more.
He hugged the older people, those who knew him way back when,
Then Gerald asked if he could have the floor.

“There are a lot of new ones; I don’t even know your names
But most of you have prayed for me for years.
I came today so you would know that I’ve been born again.”
Then Gerald stopped when he broke down in tears.

“I wish my mom and dad were here so I could let them know;
Perhaps they’re looking down from heaven above.
Their faithful prayers have followed me all through my sinful years
But through it all, I always felt their love.”

Through shouts of joy and songs of praise, we welcomed Gerald home.
We prayed for God to bless, in Jesus’ name.
We all agreed that this reunion was the best by far
And none of us would ever be the same.


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Helen Dowd 06/13/08
This has just GOT to be a winner. It certainly is in my opinion - not that that counts. I love the little incident-mentioning, things that you could so easily picture going on at a reunion--the childish challenges, the daring, etc. The funniest one was about the swollen tongue from the swallowed worm...But the part I liked the best, and brought tears to my eyes, was about Gerald turning his life around. That was wonderful! And about the rhyme and rhythm of the poem itself. I loved it. This is what I call "PRIME" poetry...Helen
Joanne Sher 06/14/08
Love all the little snapshot stanzas, and, of course, the lovely reunion at the end. What a lovely "package."
Karen Wilber 06/14/08
You dropped so many little gems in here to keep me reading just to see what happened next. Then you saved the biggest jewel for last. I loved this!
Debbie Wistrom06/18/08
So many little vingettes to set the stage. You covered a lot of ground in so few words.
Sara Harricharan 06/18/08
Heehee-what a charming picture-lol! I could see this happening, especially with the taffy hunt, very funny! ^_^
Deborah Engle 06/18/08
How wonderful! This is the reunion I want to go to.
Joshua Janoski06/18/08
I really liked the part about George eating the caterpillar.

I have never attempted a poem, but if I did, I would definitely look at some of yours to learn how it's properly done. You always have great stuff. Thanks for sharing.
Lyn Churchyard06/18/08
Oh this is so very much like some picnic's I've been to. I loved every word of this wonderful piece. So real to life. Just loved the rhythm, it flowed like.... ants over taffy :- ) Nice work Missy
Catrina Bradley 06/18/08
A charming, humorous tale, and great poetry. I love the part about the ladies not telling their age. :) VERY good!
Colin Swann06/21/08
Thanks you masters for your expertise and encouragement that we writers experience from you, right from starting out as beginners.