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06/13/08
This has just GOT to be a winner. It certainly is in my opinion - not that that counts. I love the little incident-mentioning, things that you could so easily picture going on at a reunion--the childish challenges, the daring, etc. The funniest one was about the swollen tongue from the swallowed worm...But the part I liked the best, and brought tears to my eyes, was about Gerald turning his life around. That was wonderful! And about the rhyme and rhythm of the poem itself. I loved it. This is what I call "PRIME" poetry...Helen
06/14/08
Love all the little snapshot stanzas, and, of course, the lovely reunion at the end. What a lovely "package."
06/14/08
You dropped so many little gems in here to keep me reading just to see what happened next. Then you saved the biggest jewel for last. I loved this!
06/18/08
So many little vingettes to set the stage. You covered a lot of ground in so few words.
06/18/08
Heehee-what a charming picture-lol! I could see this happening, especially with the taffy hunt, very funny! ^_^
06/18/08
How wonderful! This is the reunion I want to go to.
06/18/08
I really liked the part about George eating the caterpillar.

I have never attempted a poem, but if I did, I would definitely look at some of yours to learn how it's properly done. You always have great stuff. Thanks for sharing.
06/18/08
Oh this is so very much like some picnic's I've been to. I loved every word of this wonderful piece. So real to life. Just loved the rhythm, it flowed like.... ants over taffy :- ) Nice work Missy
06/18/08
A charming, humorous tale, and great poetry. I love the part about the ladies not telling their age. :) VERY good!
06/21/08
Thanks you masters for your expertise and encouragement that we writers experience from you, right from starting out as beginners.