The Official Writing Challenge
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05/29/08
Loved this line... This thought she savored in her heart
Great happiness to bring:
Her unborn promised son would be
The cousin of the King.

So many things we don't know about the future of our children.. yet she knew this and I am sure would have pondered what it meant to her own child... so cool!
05/31/08
Just lovely - with wonderful images and a beautiful portrayal of what Elizabeth probably thought. Truly enjoyed this piece!
Although inspired by blessed cousins,your poem beautifully illustrates portrait of two biblical mothers even a modern mom can relate to.
06/01/08
Oh Verna! I love this poem, well, actually, there aren't many of your poems I don't like:) but I really love this one! Wonderful writing! and I love your last line, too. Wow!
Very nicely done. I like the brevity of it. It says it all in so few words.
06/01/08
Verna, I found you! I loved this poem. Of course, these happen to be the most famous cousins! I couldn't help but think that I'm glad God doesn't reveal everything to us. Imagine her protecting his little head, supporting it with love and care. I couldn't bare to imagine someone, one day, cutting it off. God in His wisdom, shared only encouragement for John's mother. I would have worried like a typical mother about John spending his days dressed in camel's hair. I would have hounded him to be a better student and worked at cross purposes with God. See how your poem inspires folks to think? Fantastic job!
06/01/08
Beautiful poem! Nice meter. Great job. Blessings, Cheri
06/01/08
beautiful!!!! I've thought about what Elizabeth might have felt. You described it wonderfully.
Good job. Well done
06/01/08
this is a blessing to read. Loved the flow and the approach to the topic. Your ending tied the story with a hope-colored bow.
06/02/08
Excellent work on this! I like that you brought out Elizabeth's ponderings (which she must have had with the miracles accompanying her giving birth to John -- especially "the child she'd longed for…She'd first become a bride," "the camel's hair, locust, and wilderness," and then the most amazing event "He'd baptize God's own Son." I love this.
This flowed like cream over apple pie. Wonderful poem; terrific metre. Super job Verna.
06/02/08
This would be a great reading for a Sunday during Advent. Well done!
Loved the rhythm of this and how it fit so well with what we know about John the Baptist from the Bible. Great writing!
06/02/08
I am sooooooooooooo jealous (but in a good way if that's possible). I tried to write something about Elizabeth and Mary (or John and Jesus) but couldn't come with an angle. What a beautiful poem about an incredible family. Your rhythm was perfect, the pace just right, the rhymes lovely and the words elegant. Simply wonderful!
06/04/08
Hey, here's that poem that's got lots of enjambment! Pop on over to that thread and leave a link there, too, okay? Nice job!
06/04/08
Loved this Verna... you always inspire me with your poetry. You know a master at anything when they make it look so natural and easy. We all know it's a gift and you have it! Made me see the old story with fresh new eyes.. thanks so much.. Dianne
Incredible. Creative and endearing take on the topic.
I was blessed by your insight.
Thanks!
Verna, I love this. It's so well done, and every time I think about the baby leaping in the womb, it gives me chills. Thumbs up.
Beautiful words wonerfully arranged to tell a beautiful story more wonderous still. Loved the way everything unfolded here, just as it was meant to be!
06/04/08
Yup, Elizabeth's blessing indeed! I liked this, especially to see it sort like from her own POV. It was great! ^_^
This poem was so good, it literally sang in my mind as I read. Well done!
Absolutely lovely poem, Verna.
06/04/08
Well, Verna, I had it in my head that I'd already commented on your poem! Imagine my surprise when I glanced over the yellow boxes and didn't see my name-LOL!

I love this poem. I love the imagery of your words. I love the way you bring out the thoughts of Elizabeth, who, like any new mom, dreams about the future of her son. This poem is so gentle and good.
06/04/08
This is definitely your genre! Beautifully crafted with all the right things in place for a truly memorable poem. Kudos!
I loved it! Beautifully written.
06/05/08
Simple wonderful Verna, what great storytelling and poetry combined!