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05/22/08
Wonderful sense of place and characterization. I felt the desperation of this boy and his family. Wonderfully done.
05/22/08
I especially loved this line: "His feet felt so trapped, like a pig with its head stuck in pail." Good story.
05/22/08
Incredible descriptions and delightful characters made this a very enjoyable read. Well done!
05/23/08
I always love your descriptions. It's
nice knowing Nando better. Thanks for this entry.
05/24/08
Love this. It reminds me how good we really do have it. Thank you for that.
Laury
This is an excellent story. The vivid descriptions and strong characterization make it memorable.
05/26/08
An excellent reminder that other cultures keep animals for their usefulness, rather than as objects to be petted. Here in Mozambique no one sells tins of dog food or cat food – dogs get the family’s leftovers and cats have to hunt for their supper.
Nando is well crafted to portray so effectively this lack of sentimentally, without sacrificing his childhood sense of affection for an animal he has helped train.
05/26/08
This was a wonderful take on the topic. I was immersed into the story, and could feel the MC's agony through your vivid descriptions.
05/27/08
Excellent astmosphere--I felt immersed in that place.
05/27/08
Excellent astmosphere--I felt immersed in that place.
05/27/08
Hey, I read this already-where'd my comment go?! I can guess: I probably forgot to hit the Review button-LOL! The scenes you created in this story are so clear and powerful, that I felt I was there with the MC. I especially like the open end with its hint of what the father might do. Really good setting descriptions in this story.
The depth of this is astounding. I loved how one action changed his father's preception. Lucky donkey.