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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Father (as in paternal parent, not God) (04/10/08)

TITLE: Not Like Other Daddies
By Verna Cole Mitchell
04/12/08


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While Daddy Eagle spreads his wings and soars high in the air,
My Daddy holds me in his lap and rocks me in his chair.

While Daddy Bear climbs up a tree for honey from the bees,
My Daddy says a prayer with me when we get on our knees.

While Daddy Lion roams the woods, the proudest beast of all,
My Daddy watches over me to catch me when I fall.

While Daddy Monkey has long arms and swings from limb to limb,
My Daddy takes me for a walk, and I hold hands with him

While Daddy Duck goes in the pond and swims without his clothes,
My Daddy wears a shirt and pants to places that he goes.

While Daddy Dog plays hard all day, then snuggles in his bed,
My Daddy goes to work, he says, to bring us home the “bread.”

While Daddy Tiger stalks around to take a little look,
My Daddy, just before I sleep, reads me a story book.

While Daddy Turkey struts and makes a funny gobbling sound,
My Daddy sings a little song as we dance all around.

While Daddy Owl stays up all night and calls out, “Who are you?”
My Daddy knows me by my name and calls me Honey, too.

While Daddy Bat hangs upside down, as blind as he can be,
My Daddy gives a little wink when he says he loves me.

While other Daddies might be good, some better than the rest,
I know that, out of all of them, my Daddy is the best.


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Laury Hubrich 04/17/08
Oh! This is awesome! A great poem for kids! Awesome!
Laury
Lynda Schultz 04/17/08
Delightful.
Sally Hanan04/18/08
It's so nice to see a story for kids about their dads instead of their moms, and you did this one well.
Sharlyn Guthrie04/20/08
I can visualize the illustrations that could accompany this in storybook form. Nice job.
Jan Ackerson 04/21/08
Oh Verna, this is so good! My only complaint is that I didn't want it to stop!
Sheri Gordon04/21/08
This is absolutely wonderful, Verna. A brilliant children's book. I was picturing the illustrations as I read. You have got to pursue this. :)
Joanney Uthe04/21/08
This is a delightful poem that begs for illustration.
Helen Dowd 04/22/08
Loved this poem. What a picture of nature, and contrast to humans. It is so good of God to give us Daddies who show love, as well as protect us from harm. This would be such a good poem for a Sunday scool class of kindergarten-age to primary-age children. Good for us adults, too. I too am glad that I had a Daddy like no other....Helen
Loren T. Lowery04/23/08
This is so well written from a child's POV, that it sounds almost as if it were transcribed from a conversation at an elementery school. I really enjoyed the analogies with all the creatures, you were able to distill their fatherly qualities perfectly.
Dee Yoder 04/23/08
Verna, dear, you know how I feel about this delightful poem! Could this be THE one that gets published and illustrated? It's begging to be read to many, many delighted children!
Joshua Janoski04/23/08
I agree that this should be illustrated. The poem is begging to be made into a children's book!

I loved the rhythm and the comparison of the human daddy to each of the animal daddies. Awesome, awesome writing!
Beth LaBuff 04/23/08
This is so sweet. I want a copy of the book too. :) I love the animal daddies and the child's daddy comparisons.
Yvonne Blake 04/23/08
this would be a GREAT children's book. It sounds like one that they would have someone read over and over and over again!
Sara Harricharan 04/23/08
Awww! This is so sweet and cute! I loved the lines that reflect her daddy and then the animal dads. That was neat, I really liked the last lines best of all though. Great job! ^_^
Janice Cartwright04/24/08
I just came in to take a quick peek at the new topic and couldn't resist a few extra minutes to see who placed. Wow, Verna this is so precious and very publishable. Congratulations, your poem is so deserving of your win. I love it.
LauraLee Shaw04/24/08
Wow, Congrats on 2nd place, Verna!
Betty Castleberry04/24/08
Congrats on your win, my dear friend Verna. This was a delightful poem.
Pam Carlson-Hetland04/24/08
This is absolutely delightful, Verna. I can picture many children being blessed by this one. And as was mentioned earlier, this really should be illustrated. Fantastic job! And congrats on your placements in Masters and EC!
Beth LaBuff 04/24/08
Congrats Verna!! on your level placing and EC with this awesome poem!
Sara Harricharan 04/24/08
Hurray for VernaJ! Congrats on your EC! ^_^
Joy Faire Stewart04/24/08
Love this poem. Congratulations on your win!
Sheri Gordon04/24/08
Congratulations on your EC, Verna. I am so glad to see this place--it's awesome
Debbie Roome 04/24/08
This is a wonderful poem. Congratulations.
Pamela Kliewer04/24/08
This is great! I loved it from the first word to the last. You should make this into a children's book. :) Congratulations!
Linda Watson Owen04/24/08
Congratulations, dear sweet Verna!! What a wonderful and creative poem! I can't wait til you get back to find this surprise waiting for you!! I can sooo see this as a precious little children's book with darling illustrations! Again, CONGRATULATIONS!!
Edy T Johnson 04/25/08
Dittos to Linda's comment. God's design, daddies for all the babies, is so beautifully expressed, here. And, it has the ring of sweetness that I so appreciate in the author: you, dear Verna. I like the idea of a little illustrated children's book; I'll order 20, one for each of the grandchildren, and dozens more for gifts (^&^). I love this!
Peter Stone04/25/08
So cute, and the ending is just perfecct. So many endearing images fled through my mind with this one.
Julie Arduini04/26/08
Congrats on your well deserved win and placement! This is a good one for any age to read, and that's the mark of a talented writer.
Loren T. Lowery05/01/08
You and your writings are such a blessing. Thank-you for the kind remarks on "Before Breakfast" You'd make a good coach, too : )