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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "It's No Use Crying over Spilt Milk" (without using the actual phrase or literal exampl (02/07/08)

TITLE: The Commonwealth of Rover
By Beth LaBuff
02/10/08


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Imagine… living in a world
Where every small detail
Is optimal, with plentitude.
…But this world chased it’s tail.

Fancy now that you’re a flea
In realms you jump all over.
You’re proud to be a subject of
The Commonwealth of Rover.

In your world, feeding spots abound.
Conditions are ideal.
For lunch -- the leg, teatime -- the tail,
The neck scruff -- dinner’s meal.

Your life is good with dreams to raise
A family. You’re in charge!
Your aspirations mammoth --
For a flea, you’re livin’ large.

Envisage now that in your world
Of bark, wet nose, and fur,
He dons a new embellishment --
A canine flea collar.

Decisions must be made, and fast.
Conditions are hostile.
Without remorse you leave the beast --
A self-imposed exile.

If you keep a good attitude
The chance that you’ll succeed
Is greater, while exploring for
Buffets on which to feed.

Ahoy there! Look now if you will,
A feline… can you see? --
A chance at immigration to
Republic of Fluffy.


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Verna Cole Mitchell 02/15/08
I love the sly humor here. Just hope the cat doesn't get a flea collar!
Patty Wysong02/15/08
LoL. Oh, the poor flea--at least there's other options. Cute!
Joanne Sher 02/16/08
Cute and fun! (seems to be lots of puppy entries this week hehe). Enjoyed this one very much. Very clever.
Betty Castleberry02/16/08
Super creative, despite a stumble or two on the meter.
Love the ending.
LauraLee Shaw02/18/08
What a clever rhyme! I was tapping my feet the whole time!

I LOVE this stanza:
Envisage now that in your world
Of bark, wet nose, and fur,
He dons a new embellishment --
A canine flea collar.
Laury Hubrich 02/18/08
So cute! Don't think I've ever once, in my 44 years, ever read a poem about a flea! Too, too funny!
Laury
Yvonne Blake 02/20/08
LOL! Poor Fluffy!
I was hoping for more... different "enemies"... a scratching paw, a bubble bath, etc. :)
Great job
Jan Ackerson 02/20/08
How on earth did you come up with this POV? Adorable!
Sara Harricharan 02/20/08
I liked your first verse the best. It was great! Nice job! ^_^
Sara Harricharan 02/20/08
Ooops! I hit the wrong key and it submitted before I was done! I can honestly say that i've never read a story from this POV. The last line with the republic of Fluffy-that was too funny. Nice writing! ^_^
Debbie Wistrom02/20/08
Great tie in to your title. I grinned all the way through this piece, thanks for a nice lunch break. Keep up the good words.
Sally Hanan02/21/08
What a great title and idea, and the ending is purrfect!
Henry Clemmons02/21/08
I'm sporting a huge smile of appreciation. very catchy, clever and rythmatic. Your voice is consistant and on target delivering each line like a seasoned pro. I truely enjoyed your entry and talent.
Dianne Janak02/21/08
I loved this story... Light and fun and consistent throughout! You always bless me and this did not disappoint... Dianne J.