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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Music (03/08/07)
Heat rises from the shriveled plain
On billows of choking dust
Demons curse the parched prairie
Their sentence so unjust

Wilted leaf and crumbled ground
Advance upon the lands
Hot breezes with their plague of drought
The arid plight expands

A little child lifts up her wish
Her hands fold tight in prayer
“Dear Lord, Daddy’s crops are dying
But I know you still care

“Please, Dear God if it’s your will
Make it rain tonight
Daddy’s worried and Mama’s sad
Please, won’t you make it right?”

The trusting child drifts off to sleep
The night is black and clear
The firmament begins to swirl
And hazy clouds draw near

Light slashes keen across the sky
God’s jagged saber flashes
Booming, rolling thunder sounds
Nature’s own percussion crashes

Winds join in and sing with might
A stirring melody
Silver raindrops harmonize
In heaven’s symphony

The earth beneath the precious drops
Trills with gratitude
And faded blossom rises up
To hum the interlude

Branches bow with uncommon prize
And join the rhythmic measure
Bullfrogs sing in wonderment
Of such ethereal treasure

The rain abates with morning light
The celestial band now still
A little girl awakes and smiles
At raindrops on her sill

“Daddy, Oh, come look,” she cries
“It rained. I knew it would.
I prayed for it and I believed,
Because the Lord is good.”
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Mo
03/15/07
Very nice!
Verna Cole Mitchell 
03/16/07
Just like a child's prayer is beautiful, so is a child's faith. This is a lovely poem in words and message.
Myrna Noyes
03/16/07
Lovely, rhythmical, descriptive poem! Ah, the faith of a little child is such a sweet and precious thing! Well-done! :)
Elizabeth Baize
03/16/07
Growing up in a rural setting I can identify with this poem so well. You truly expressed this in a priceless way!
cindy yarger
03/16/07
Wonderful!
Marilee Alvey
03/17/07
You know, I wrote this same poem once, when I was little. LOL! I wish! Your cadence, your images create such vivid word pictures that I got thirsty and had to apply moisturizer. Not only that, it captures the innocence of a child's faith, all in one. How do you do it? Lots of talent, here!
Jacquelyn Horne
03/18/07
Wonderful poem about the faith of a child.
Loren T. Lowery
03/19/07
The imagery, the message so well expressed. Wonderful to read.
Jan Ackerson
03/20/07
I love the title, and the last stanza, and your rhyme scheme--well, frankly, I like it all!
Sharlyn Guthrie
03/20/07
This is such a sweet example of the faith of a child. Very nice!
Pat Guy
03/20/07
You kept the feel of innocence all the way through in this 'child of faith' poem. Kudos girl! You did good!
Joanne Sher 
03/20/07
So sweet and delightful. I loved your imagery, and the faith of your child. Wonderful.
Jen Davis
03/21/07
Wow! This is really good. I love how you were able to use the topic to tell a story and share a message. Loved the title too!
Tiffany Secula
03/21/07
So beautiful and wonderful!! I loved this so much! The faith of little children we should all have! Keep Writing!
Sara Harricharan
03/21/07
Cute. I liked the tie in with the Music theme, the first stanza was my favorite though, with the parched prarie and sentence unjust. ^_^
LaNaye Perkins
03/21/07
Having lived in the country most of my life I can totally relate to the message here. I love the way you told this story so vividly and in poetry. It was a blessing to read and I really loved it.
Sandra Petersen
03/21/07
Such a sweet reminder of how we should be in the face of adversity. This was beautiful.

Once or twice the rhythm seemed to falter but the message and the descriptive words made up for it.

I especially savored these stanzas:

"The earth beneath the precious drops
Trills with gratitude
And faded blossom rises up
To hum the interlude"

and, of course, that last stanza with its expression of childlike faith. Nice!
Donna Powers
03/21/07
So touching, and very sweet! I loved this well-written poem. Thanks for sharing it.
Laurie Glass 
03/21/07
What a heartwarming poem and one that builds our faith. Just lovely.
Julie Arduini
03/21/07
I loved it! The title, the child's faith, and the prairie backdrop especially drew me in. Great job!
Tiffanie Chezum
03/22/07
I like this a lot.

Winds join in and sing with might
A stirring melody
Silver raindrops harmonize
In heaven’s symphony

This reminds me of staying on rainy nights enjoying the sounds.
christine bastow
03/22/07
As I enjoyed this beautiful work of art, what came to mind was "Out of your belly shall flow rivers of living water"


Joanne Malley
03/22/07
Applauds all around! Keep writing poetry, Betty. :) Blessings, Jo
Verna Cole Mitchell 
04/24/19
Looks like I really liked it before, but I really like it again! I don't think I've ever seen an entry read that many times!