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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Craft (as in handcraft) (02/08/07)

TITLE: Just One Rule
By Betty Castleberry
02/10/07


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He walked up behind his wife, watching her quietly for a moment. She was sitting on a large flat rock holding something in her hand. He spoke softly so he wouldn’t startle her. “Hi honey, I’m home. What’s for dinner?”

She swung her shiny dark hair over her shoulder. “Oh, hello dear. Passion fruit. Is that okay?”

“Sounds fine. What are you doing?”

“Crafts.”

“Crafts? What are crafts?”

“Things like this. See?”

She held out a green twig twisted into a heart shape. “I’m going to take one of those little rose buds and attach it right here in the center. Won’t that be pretty?”

“Umm, yeah, sure. How did you learn to do that?”

“Well, while you’ve been tending the plants and trees, I’ve been working on some things. You know, practicing.” She made a sweeping gesture, indicating several things on the ground in front of her, then picked one of them up. “Look at this.”

A delicate braided chain of yellow and white flowers lay across her palm. “I’m very proud of it. Do you like it?”

He stroked his chin. “Sure, I guess. What are you going to do with all this stuff?”

“Decorate with it, of course. You know, hang a few things here and there. Add a little color and really make this place pop. Maybe even repurpose a few things.”

Puzzled, he looked around. When he turned slightly, a vine with sweet-scented flowers brushed against his leg. He could barely move without bumping into a fruiting tree or lush green foliage. It was a stunning place. “Okay, but how could you improve on this?”

“Oh I wouldn’t call it improving, really, maybe just adding a little. I think we could move this boulder over there. It would really open the space up, and make more room to show off some of the things I’m making. You know, honey, I’d really love to showcase my crafts. I don’t have patterns or anything. I’m just learning as I go. Aren’t you proud of me?”

“Well, sure, of course. I’m just kind of surprised, that’s all.”

She handed him a wreath. “It took me all afternoon to make this. I’m going to hang it from that big branch right there. Look at the detail. It’s really going to make a nice focal point. I really think the colors I’ve used are going to be all the rage this season.”

He studied it carefully. There was something in it he didn’t recognize. “What are these?”

“Those? Just some peelings.”

“I’ve never seen them before. What are the peelings from?”

“The most delicious fruit. I had company this afternoon, and we had the nicest visit. Were you aware that the serpent can speak? Never mind, that’s beside the point. He helped me string berries, and we had a few laughs. He’s quite charming, actually. First thing you know, he talked me into trying the fruit.”

He looked at the beautiful woman sitting next to him. “You didn’t.”

She shrugged. “Well, yes, as a matter of fact I did, and as you can see, nothing happened to me. It is the most delectable fruit I’ve ever eaten. I’ve got more right here. You should try it yourself. Go ahead, eat some.”

Hesitantly, he took the fruit and bit into it. A burst of honey-like sweetness exploded on his tongue. “Wow, that is good.”

“Told ya.”

“Yes, but now we’ve got a problem. The Maker will be by soon and He will see what we’ve done. He told us not to eat that fruit. That’s the only thing He asked us not to do, and now we’ve disobeyed Him.”

“Here. Put on these fig leaves I stitched together this afternoon. At least we’ll be presentable when He gets here.”

“You know, Evie, we’re quite a pair, aren’t we? You said earlier you didn’t have a pattern for the things you were making, but we are different. God gave us a very carefully laid out pattern with one rule to follow, just one, and we couldn’t even do that.”

“You’re right, Adam. My visitor this afternoon was quite crafty, but I’ve only got myself to blame. What should we do?”

“I think from now on we should follow the pattern. By the way, would you be needing any snake skin for any of your crafts?”


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Karen Deikun02/15/07
VERY creative. I'm not sure all of our crafters out there would like to think of their work as a product of the fall, but this was delightfully written just the same - a tongue in cheek approach to crafing and adding in the crafty serpent, too.
Laurie Glass02/15/07
How clever and very well written. I'm always too chicken to try something like this, but I wouldn't be if I could pull it off as well as you. I'm impressed.
Joanne Sher 02/16/07
Cute and clever - love the last line! You definitely made "Evie" a hoot.
Mariane Holbrook02/16/07
I'll say this. You are brave!I couldn't even attempt it but you pulled it off and did it masterfully!
Christine Dunn02/17/07
A very unique take on the topic! Well done.
Venice Kichura02/17/07
Super creative take on an old, old Bible story---I'm betting this places very high!
william price02/17/07
Nice, smart, crafty twist to a familiar story. Loved the retilian ending. A very enjoyable read. God bless.
Tiffany Secula02/18/07
Loved It! The pattern reference is terrific and the "snake skin" comment was just perfect! Great Job!
Jacquelyn Horne02/19/07
Unique approach to crafting. Where do you come up with them? Neat (does that date me?) ending.
Myrna Noyes02/21/07
Very well-written piece with clever humor but also an important message! I enjoyed this very much! :)
Pat Guy 02/21/07
What a way to lossen up and have some fun! This is GREAT Betty! Why am I not surprised. You've made it girl! ;)
Jan Ackerson 02/21/07
Clever! I really grinned at your use of "repurpose." Just the sort of lingo that pompous, artsy decorators would use. This was a really fun read.
Beth Muehlhausen02/21/07
Woo hoo, I didn't see it coming!!! Great writing - very original/creative.

:-)
Joanne Malley02/21/07
Now that was different! tee hee. :) Original and fun! Blessings, Jo
Patty Wysong02/21/07
What a fun read!! Evie cerainly was a typical woman--I laughed over moving boulders and Adam's response. Excellent!
Julie Arduini02/21/07
Oh this is excellent! My husband and I played a cheesy Adam and Eve in a childrens' Christmas play---sure wish we'd had your rendition to work with. This is inspiring, awesome work!
Marilee Alvey02/21/07
Man, if that isn't like a woman, Betty! You cracked me up! Very creative...and nice "snakeskin" ending! The difference between the sexes hasn't changed much, has it? We do like to feather our nests! Great job! You surely DO fit in Master's!
T. F. Chezum02/27/07
Boy, I'm late jumping on this bandwagon ;-) Very creative and well written ... Great job.
Linda Watson Owen02/01/09
Cute as a button, Betty! I love the play on the word 'crafty'! heehee! So imaginative and actually believable too!! I could just see Adam and Eve and the old serpent in this. Great job!