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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Parent (11/16/06)

TITLE: My Son
By Amy Michelle Wiley
11/22/06


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Pain wraps her hot fingers around my middle, twisting, pushing until I scream. My lungs struggle for air. I suck it into my raw throat. “Joe!” The cry that comes from my depths finds only a whisper of breath. I am alone.

But no.

If there is one thing I have learned, it is that I am not alone. God, I need You. I’m scared.

“Mitzy?”

Joe is back. I cling to him, sobs wrenching my body. The stress of the last months sweeps down on me, suffocating me. The first moment I had discovered I was pregnant comes back, the shock of an unmarried girl. The fear that Joe would leave. Then the relief of his commitment, overshadowed by the rejection of those around us.

Another contraction interrupts my tears, leaving no room for extra thoughts. I seek my beloved’s eyes, only to find my own fear mirrored. For a moment I doubt, doubt that God was with us, doubt that this is in His plan.

The pain eases for the moment and I lay my clammy hand on Joe’s cheek. It finds wetness. “We are alone.” My voice is raspy. “If anything goes wrong we will loose the baby.”

His hand wraps around mine. His eyes close for what seems forever. When they open, the fear is mingled with something else. Something I have seen often in the last months.

“Faith, Mitzy. That’s all He asks. Hang on a little longer. Trust.”

Come near, my God. Remind me.

Peace surrounds us. For a time I rest. Gather strength.

“You are blessed.” Joe strokes my hair. “This child--” His voice breaks and only his eyes can speak, shining with pride and love.

Forgive me for my doubting.

The pain comes again, stronger. Unbearable. I push. My body strains. Again. Again.

“It’s a boy.” Joe grasps him, cradles him, wetness clinging to them both. Bonding.

I let out a ragged breath. I have done it. We have done it.

A brightness flows through the window, illuminating my husband. Lighting my son. We lean close, three of us together.

“His name,” Joe speaks the words my heart sings, “is Jesus.”


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Lynda Schultz 11/23/06
I hope someone grabs this to publish in some soon-to-come Christmas production. Beautifully done.
Cherry Bieber11/26/06
This is very well done! I almost completely relived the birth of my first child thirty years ago...some things one just never forgets!
Sharlyn Guthrie11/26/06
You created a very believable scene and realistic emotions.
Well done!
Debbie Sickler11/27/06
I'm glad you decided to write this. It turned out great. :)
Marie Fieldman11/27/06
Cool. I wasn't expecting that. The nicknames really threw me off.
william price11/27/06
Kool!! Very good. I liked the beginning and the ending was great. Nice story telling and writing. God bless.
Donna Haug11/29/06
Powerful. Sometimes we need to be reminded that Joseph and Mary were very real people with very real emotions. Good work!
Cheri Hardaway 11/29/06
I love how you turned two very familiar characters into familiar people. It's easy to deify people from the Word, forgetting that they were merely human, just like us. Blessings, Cheri
Donna Emery11/29/06
Very sweet. I enjoyed reading this very much. Thanks for sharing it.
Ruth Neilson11/29/06
I liked this. Loved the modern twist to this beloved Bible story. You've got the birth and I've got the first 'chat' with Joseph and Jesus.
Joanne Sher 11/30/06
So real and vividly descriptive. I felt like I was right there. I suspected near the beginning what it was, but it did not take away from the wonder in the least!