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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Rest (01/17/13)
Souls lined up against a wall
Few will stand, many will fall
Strength of spirit comes from within
To those who pray for lack of sin

Weariness carries great weight
On souls that fall against hell's gate
Burdens sink the bodies of many
Who have no faith, no not any

A few do make recovery
Standing tall in discovery
Of Christ extending them His grace
With evidence of a heavenly place

Those sincere in their prayers
Receive His mercy in gentle layers
Love, hope, and great compassion
Flowing abundant in His fashion

On this wall I stood so weary
Heart breaking, eyes so teary
Watching others as they fell
Into deepest pits of hell

Inside I heard a call so deep
A drop of hope began to seep
From the heavens came a light
With these words He came to sight

“Child, you are mine, did you know?
I'll carry you each step you go
My arms are strong enough you see
Come rest your weary soul on me”
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Alicia Renkema
01/25/13
Lynn, this is absolutely precious. Your caring, compassionate heart before the Lord for all the people you know and the world at large. It can overwhelm one which is one of the important points of your poem. It doesn't need to when we lean on Him which you also share so wonderfully. For He loves these people far more than we ever could and He has it all worked out. However as you graphically show in the beginning of your poem, hell is real and eternal and the soul that doesn't trust the Lord Jesus with his being will go there. Yet, praise be to God He does carry us. All He asks in return is that we love Him and one another. Hugs and Blessings girl, jerseygirl
Loren T. Lowery
01/25/13
Your heart always comes through in your poems and by doing so touches so many lives. I especially liked the last stanza and the comfort it gives.
C D Swanson 
01/25/13
Oh I loved this! Such beautiful thoughts, feelings, and powerful meaning and message. I adored the opening and the closing especially.


God Bless~
Allison Egley 
01/26/13
This is good. I especially love the last line.
Richard Hicks
01/26/13
I love and sensed the sweet Spirit of the Lord as I read this. Thw words seems to beautifully flow right off the pages onto my heart! I will definitely be looking for more of your writings in the future. I will read it one more time after I submit this!
Danielle King 
01/26/13
What a lovely faith filled poem. A joy to read.
Joe Moreland
01/26/13
Beautiful, sad and hopeful...all at once. Masterful job.
Christina Banks
01/27/13
I really appreciate your last line. Nicely done!
Noel Mitaxa 
01/27/13
I live the build-up through the honest depictions of doubt and fear - towards the sure hope at the close. Great job
Myrna Noyes
01/27/13
Oh, I love the tender invitation in the last stanza of this lovely poem! I don't know how any weary soul can resist it! The whole piece has such an excellent message!
Virgil Youngblood 
01/27/13
The title was a beautiful fit to the invitation extended in the final stanza. Well done.
Jan Ackerson
01/29/13
Well done in many ways, particularly in capturing the relief of the poem's narrator at being saved. I wish you'd developed the "wall" metaphor a bit--it's not clear what the wall represents, and you have souls lined up against it, and standing on it. Since it's the poem's main image, it needs to be clarified for the reader. Your rhymes were often refreshing and masterful.
Sheldon Bass 
01/30/13
This is a sweet poem that carries the reader through the wonderful emotion of being saved. Very nice rhymes.