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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Achievement (03/08/12)
Over Viewpoint ridge
Snaking down the hill
Trail forked at top
Winding
To road below
What make it?
Who and why?
50 years and
Still there

Snake Tongue Trail

50 years, memories fade
Others live on
Memories shaping a life
“Mom, please?”
Begging, pleading
“Let us go!”
Three children
Asking a thousand, a zillion times
Me and siblings
“Please, just once?”
For
Over the steep edge
Hike the trail
Around rocks
Sage brush
Junipers
Twisting, turning
Slipping, sliding
To the bottom
“Please?!”

Adventure!
Snake Tongue Trail!

Quiet
Silence growing louder
Beckoning faces
Pleading eyes
Stillness prevails
The world around hushed
Older eyes contemplating
This time?

For Snake Tongue Trail

Heroes?
Bragging rights?
An exploit unrivaled?
Or disappointment?

“Wait here.”
Mom departs
Wondering, is it true?
To the ridge, peering
Waiting
From the bottom
A wave
A hundred miles below!

Careful and careless
Three to a quest
A life time feat awaits

Snake Tongue Trail challenging us
Daring us
Excitement overcoming fear
Laughing, encouraging
‘Three Musketeers’
Steepness ignored
Tumbling rocks mocked
Onward!

We gaze back up
Snake Tongue Trail
Looking so little now

“We did it!”
Yes, we did.
A child’s first triumph!
Snake Tongue Trail conquered!

Strength for the tomorrows
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Date
C D Swanson 
03/16/12
A beautiful poem completely on topic, and flowed so smoothly.

Nicely done. God Bless~
Joanne Sher 
03/19/12
LOVE this line: Silence growing louder. So vivid, and a good fit to the topic.
Edmond Ng
03/21/12
A very creative approach on topic and an interesting read. Strength for tomorrow is surely what we always need.
Hiram Claudio
03/22/12
There were so many word pictures created in this piece that were so engaging -actually helping you to feel the trail. I enjoyed the message of strength and overcoming fear. A powerful piece of writing.

Not sure if the center alignment was intentional - if it was, wasn't sure what the goal was. I personally would have preferred it to be left justified - just think it may have read easier - but that's just me.

A powerful piece of writing. Thanks!
C D Swanson 
03/22/12
A hearty Congratulations!
God Bless you~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
03/22/12
Wow this is powerful and the visual effect stunning. Congratulations on your HC and on placing 14th overall!
Noel Mitaxa 
03/23/12
Very creative and engaging work. Congrats on your HC.