The Official Writing Challenge
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12/03/10
Great last line..."to taste a bit of grace." Nice rhythm and rhyme in this poem. You did a good job of using body language to reinforce the title.
12/04/10
Very descriptive imagery with very simple language; though I feel extra verses are needed as a clearer bridge to the positive change at the end.
I could really relate to the first line. Whenever I see someone cross their arms I feel like they're screaming Go away! Nice job.