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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Conversation (face to face) (10/07/10)
The sun was setting and dusk was painting our portrait

With ashen hand
I caressed her face
Golden hues of sunset lace
I drew her near
Where I could taste
… Her kiss

With sore eyes closed
I caressed her ear
Gentle strokes of loving grace
I whispered warm
Where she could hear
… My love

The sun was setting and dusk was painting our portrait
A young couple talking for the last time

She cried a tear
And spoke so soft
Her stare was sad and focused off
I’ll miss you true
And I will fear
… Your death

She spoke of God
And Heaven’s harp
She quote a prayer from Jesus’ heart
He loves you too
Will never stop
… She shared

The sun was setting and dusk was painting our portrait
A young couple talking for the last time
Framed arm in arm by twilight’s charm

My hairless head
Was shaded pink
Was kind of scared
And couldn’t think
I asked her please
To share her faith
… Again

He sacrificed
And paid the price
He bled his life and rose again
He paved a path
For you and I
To bow and claim
… He’s Lord

The sun was setting and dusk was painting our portrait
A young couple talking for the last time
Framed arm in arm by twilight’s charm
A lover’s salvation, a conversation, for all to see

I prayed a prayer
And made Him Lord
We clasped our hands and cried some more
I held her close
Now face to face
And kissed her lips
… Until …

I’ll die that night
Inside her arms
I’ll breathe my last set free from harm
I’ll praise the Lord
On streets of gold
My love was right
… Amen

The sun was setting and dusk was painting our portrait
A young couple talking for the last time
Framed arm in arm by sunset’s charm
A lover’s salvation, a conversation, for all see
… From Heaven
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Member Comments
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Date
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/21/10
This is simply beautiful and lovely.
Jeanne E Webster
10/22/10
Most heartfelt poem, with a touch of love, loyalty, endearing devotion. This will soften your soul and lighten your heart. Well written and immensely enjoyed. Blessings. :)
Colin Swann
10/24/10
This is absolutely beautiful - I hope it does well for you.
Laury Hubrich 
10/24/10
Wonderful picture you painted here with your words.
Dee Yoder
10/24/10
I love how you slowly drew the picture, frame to frame, until the whole story was entirely revealed. Wonderful word pictures, deftly used!
Cheryl Harrison
10/25/10
Wow! This is beautiful.
Mona Purvis
10/25/10
This does for me what I expect and long for in poetry. It is so rich!
It resonates in such a haunting way.
Splendid! High marks all the way to EC.

Mona
Lollie Hofer 
10/25/10
I like how you kept adding to the first line as the poem progressed. Beautifully written.
Brenda Rice
10/26/10
Beautiful, endearing and touching. I liked it so much. It has a nice flow.
Beth LaBuff 
10/27/10
Very unique! I've never seen or contemplated a poem like this. I loved how you kept adding to your theme stanza and the message here is beautiful and haunting! Great work!
Loren T. Lowery
10/27/10
Beautiful and moving. The emotions brought out by your words are familiar yet achingly convicting.
Connie Dixon
10/28/10
Really enjoyed the unique style in this beautiful piece. Reading it blessed me.
Margaret Kearley
10/28/10
Really beautiful. Congratulations on your well deserved first placing.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/28/10
Congratulations on 1st place EC!!!
Angela M. Baker-Bridge
10/28/10
How wonderful this piece is!! And what a deserving first place...congrats!
Loren T. Lowery
10/28/10
So glad to see this place. Richly deserved! Loren
Beth LaBuff 
10/28/10
Hey Congratulations, Henry! 1st place Editor's Choice!
Caitlyn Meissner
10/28/10
Congratulations on your EC! Great job!
Dee Yoder
10/28/10
Congrats on your EC, Henry! This is a beautiful and lovely poem. Well- deserved!
Mona Purvis
10/28/10
Told you so! Cream rises to the top. I wholeheartedly agree with the judges on this being number one. Splendid.

Mona
Marita Thelander 
10/28/10
wow. What an interesting style of poetry. Very bittersweet story interlaced with a well crafted skill that pulls that emotion out of the reader. Congrats on your #1 seat.
Benjamin Graber
10/28/10
What a beautiful poem, Henry! I love the sentimental feel you gave it! Congratulations on first place!
Jody Day 
10/28/10
A subtly magnificent and gracefully poignant piece that really touched me...thank you and congratulations.
Catrina Bradley
10/28/10
Congrats, Henry! What a beautiful, sad, joyful poem.
Patricia Turner 
10/28/10
From the first masterful line, down through each beautiful stanza you painted these last poignant moments of these young lovers with passion and compassion. Thanks for an amazing entry. Congratulations on your first place EC!
Rachel Phelps
10/29/10
Beautiful, beautiful. Masterfully done.
Sarah Elisabeth
11/01/10
Such a beautiful poem from beginning to end. Wow.

Congrats!