The Official Writing Challenge
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08/28/08
Oh I wish every young couple would read this beautiful poem and apply it to their relationship. You packed a punch into this short poem.
08/29/08
Wonderful message--and from a poetic standpoint, I love the soft alliteration in the second stanza. Lovely entry.

I'd love to see this with a different title, something more poetic that doesn't take away from the impact of your last line.

This is very, very worthy of publication.
You have wonderful advice wrapped in poetic words. I love your first line; it's beautiful.
08/30/08
I feel you are God's mouthpiece in this poem. So eloquent--like music that touches the heart.
I like this poem very much! I know it's a few months later but this is a job so well done I had to say something :)

Keep Up the Great Work,
Elizabeth B.