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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: The Family Reunion (06/05/08)
Tearing metal, shattered glass
Sirens scream, bright lights flash
My life nears its end

My father near, waiting now
Hand outstretched, he’ll show me how
I am almost home

Bright light seen, drawing so near
The pain now gone, no more fear
I’m embraced by love

Loved ones waiting, arms held wide
Sweet joy and love, now abides
My soul fills with peace

Such reunion, those long lost
Happy freedom, no more cost
My cup overflows

Then I see Him, my heart pounds
He looks at me, love abounds
My Jesus comes near

Joy now complete, all is well
I wish so much, I could tell
Those that are grieving

Darkness surrounds, back once more
Pain returns, by sadness torn
I’ve work left to do

Jesus tells me, I must stay
Much work to do, much to say
I’m to reach those lost

Just a glimpse, reunion seen
It is a fact, and no dream
One day I’ll be there
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Beth LaBuff 
06/12/08
This is very creative, about an almost heavenly reunion. I like your metrical and stanza structure and well as other poetic elements you take advantage off (enjambment--from Jan's Master Class-- as well as no ending punctuation). I like your hope in this, "Just a glimpse, reunion seen -- It is a fact, and no dream -- One day I’ll be there" Nice work on this.
Chely Roach
06/16/08
I REALLY loved this...I adored the rhythm of it, and of coarse, the hopeful message. Well done!
Jan Ackerson
06/16/08
I really like the structure of this poem, and the title is perfect. Well done.
Mariane Holbrook
06/18/08
I, too, love the structure of this poem. It's very, very well done! Kudos!
Tessy Fuller
06/18/08
This flowed so nicely - very well done.
Debbie Wistrom
06/18/08
This is thought provoking and well done. Loved the out of box take on this topic-you nailed it.
Sara Harricharan
06/18/08
Your title fits really well and I like this 'new style'. You did good with it and I like how it flows as I read. lovely! ^_^
Catrina Bradley
06/19/08
I love the format of your poem - the short lines are like fleeting glimpses of the MC's experiences. My heart pounded right along with his/hers when he caught sight of Jesus. (That was my favorite part.) A lot is packed into this short piece. Very nice!
Joshua Janoski
06/19/08
I could actually "feel" this poem as I read it. The impact of the crash, the beauty of Heaven, and then the return trip back to Earth. Very nice! :)
Betty Castleberry
06/19/08
Love this format, love the hope at the end. Big thumbs up.
Norma-Anne Hough
06/21/08
This was truly beautiful. I could feel your emotions throughout. Well done.
Blessings,
Norms