The Official Writing Challenge
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11/13/07
I like your "about face" in the second part of your poem, especially the contrast between this line, "My failures cite my past of shame" and this line, "And Love’s brief war with shame was won". You have some nice poetic thoughts "The razor shards of a broken heart
Have pierced my soul as well" Keep working on your poetry.
11/13/07
You showed the pain in the beginning and how love can reach past it. The ryhthm and rhyme were well balanced.
11/13/07
This is extremely creative and beautifully written. His love can certainly be seen in this piece!
11/14/07
Loved your poetic definition of one of the greatest weapons of evangelism ... love. I like a poet that actually has something to say. God bless.
11/14/07
Lovely contrasts and message. It's wonderfully written and crafted.
You know me well enough to know that I can certainly chill with this... Thanks Ben. It's much-needed therapy.