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By George Parler
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“Now where are we supposed to be going?” Looking around for something familiar.
“You will see, now come on. I want to get back before dark.”
“Well let us go back now, it is hot and I am thirsty.”
“Quit whining and keep walking, it isn’t much further.”
“What isn’t much further? This better not be another one of your jokes.”
The older brother stops and turns face to face with his brother. “This is not a joke; do you see me laughing.”
“Well this won’t be the first time that I’ve gotten into big trouble from following you; will it?”
The older bother calming down, “What, you don’t trust me?”
“Of course I trust you. That is what confuses me. Why do I trust you?”
“Because I am older than you and I can kick your tail that is why, now let us go.”
They continued on their path until they came to a thick wall of weeds and brush. The older brother put his finger up to his lips, whispering, “Shhh, come look through these bushes. But be quiet.”
The nervous excitement was building, what could it be? Inching to the gap in the brush where his older brother pointed, he crawled on his hands and knees.
“Good heavens, what is it? He could not believe his eyes as his heart was racing. How did you find this? Looking back over his shoulder he was startled to see his brother standing over him. “Cain?” Terror filled his eyes. “Cain! What are you doing! No!!!!”
Cain’s jealous rage released it’s venom until he stood exhausted. The stick in his, now crimson, fell to the ground. He stooped down and peered through the gap in the brush. There at the gate, the flaming sword, the guardian of Eden stood watch. “What do you think of my sacrifice now?”
The wilderness and all of creation was still and silent. Turning their backs to the footsteps of a marked man, who’s only thought was, I better get home, it will be dark soon.
The earth received the flow of Abel's life as it cried out to heaven. Though all of creation was confused as to what had taken place, the earth some how new this would only be the first of many stains to come. The earth grieved.
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A few niggles--watch out for it's/its and new/knew.
Wonderful use of the topic word in a finely-written entry.