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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)
Deep losses overwhelm me, pull me down.
Such grief and hopelessness pervade my soul.
Seems nothing lifts me up or gives me peace.
My devastated heart can’t be consoled.

My soul is drowning in my unshed tears.
All hope and joy are gone, feel only pain.
It’s oh so dark in my abandoned heart
Where only sadness and depression reign.

My grief erupts, inside the pressure builds,
Wells up, I’m longing for relief, release.
Yet with the burning lump stuck in my throat,
Mysterious dry eyes prevent such peace.

It seems impossible to even cry.
Experience I’ve never had before.
My unshed tears are killing me inside.
Don’t feel I can withstand it anymore.

I know the only way that I’ll survive
Is letting loose of pain that keeps me bound.
Take time alone to let my feelings out…
No whimper even comes - make not a sound.

I feel the loving touch of the Divine.
Find comfort now that I can feel Him near.
I feel a bit of softening inside.
At last my heart spills out a single tear.
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Marilyn Schnepp 
08/03/07
A lovely poem that takes on the topic of "sad"...and brings it home. A+ and Kudos!
Beth Muehlhausen
08/03/07
Glad that tear made it out...probably followed by a gush of others.

A hard image full of pain, but realistic. You've created some really ood tension here, something your reader can "feel."

Verna Cole Mitchell 
08/04/07
You've created a good poem, making sadness palpable. I like your message.
valerie chambers
08/05/07
SO true in the telling.
Dee Yoder
08/06/07
The last few lines are very beautiful descriptions of how the Lord can begin to heal us, simply allowing our hearts to grieve.
Seema Bagai 
08/06/07
You expressed the topic beautifully in this poem.
Linda Watson Owen
08/07/07
Beautiful concept for this poem...unshed tears. Those are the ones that really do the damage aren't they, but you so effectively moved the emotion and experience to a sweet release. So well done! You nailed the topic and held your readers.
Carol Penhorwood 
11/23/09
Again, your transparency will bring healing to yourself and others.

I especially love your lines...
"I know the only way that I'll survive is letting loose of pain that keeps me bound."

In Jesus we can find the cure for unshed tears.

Wonderful writing!