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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Life (06/15/06)

TITLE: Birth Pains
By Shari Armstrong
06/15/06


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”I’m so tired.” I blew the bangs out of my eyes. “I can’t do this.”

”Yes, you can. Breath. Relax. Just do it. I’ll be right here with you the whole way.”

I stared at the painting on the wall. The impressionistic colors blurred even more. I squinted, revealing a lovely flower arrangement. “Can I walk? Just for a little bit? My back aches. I think it would help.”

“Maybe for a little while, but things could progress at any moment, so don’t be gone long.”

”I promise.” The carpeted hallway muffled my footsteps. “A name…. I can’t do this. I still haven’t decided on a name.”

I felt a gentle tap on my shoulder.

“You need to go back now.”

“Please, just a little more time?” I tried to rub the stiffness out of my back.

”Time is short.”

Exasperated and exhausted, I had few options. “I know.” I had to get this out before I exploded. “I’ll go back, just in case...that’s it...Justin.”

“Are you ready now?”

”Yes.” The pressure was building, “After this, life will settle back into a normal routine.”

“Do you really think things will go back to the way they were?”

”Well, no. Things never stay the same, do they?”

”No.”

I settled back into place. “I feel kind of sick.”

“That’s normal. You’ll be fine. Just focus.”

I pushed and struggled. I cried. Before I knew it, the floodgates released. Everything was over in a rush.

Tired and numb, I looked at the words before me. I had poured my life, my heart, my faith onto the pages. Now, I just prayed that God’s inspiration that was with me the whole time would touch someone else’s life.

“See? I knew you could do it.”


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Jan Ackerson 06/22/06
Yowsers, I love this! I suspected that there would be a twist (I won't give it away here), but that wasn't the twist I expected at all, so you've really accomplished what you set out to do. Top notch.
Lynda Schultz 06/22/06
How very clever of you! And, yes, that's what it feels like. Good job.
Brenda Craig06/23/06
Wow! This is so cool, and what a twist; you twisted right out of the box with class. You made a big punch with so few words. Absolutely creative.

Blessings
Brenda
Ann FitzHenry06/24/06
I loved this! Very creative and clever.
terri tiffany06/24/06
Nice job! great twist!:)
Sue Dent06/26/06
. . . or "The Birthing of a . . " NO, I can't give it away! Read for yourself. You won't be disappointed. Great job! Hmmmm. . . as usual!
Sherry Wendling06/26/06
Count me into your admirers! I was hooked A to Z. Your ending is a tremendous, breathless loop of sudden recognition...But I also loved the pace and flow that led up to it. A perfect stroke in so few words...I'm envious. Brilliant!
Ann Grover06/26/06
I didn't expect the twist... but I KNOW the feeling. (Except I have to get up and nibble at something... several times...)

Just one correction... second line. Should be 'breathe.'
Dr. Sharon Schuetz06/26/06
This is so a creative. I too loved the unexpected way this twists. Great job.
Trina Courtenay06/26/06
Okay, at first I was left dumbfounded, & lost. WHAT? I don't get it. But after the third read (yes it took me 3x) I finally got it! :) lol What a great twist Shari!

Blessings & Keep writing for the glory of HIM.

Trina<><
Pat Guy 06/26/06
Okay girl - you got me! Totally! And wow! It does feel like that sometimes! Agony but pure bliss!

LOVED IT! :)
George Parler 06/28/06
Excellent creativity. I was pleasantly derailed at the end. Very nice twist and writing.
Rita Garcia06/29/06
This is so good! You write with a flair that grabs the reader and propels them to the end. God has given you a special talent!
Joanne Sher 07/21/06
So very cool! I love this - and it took me two read-throughs to figure out what the twist was (if I hadn't read everyone's comments I probably wouldn't have given it a second read!). The pace of this was wonderful, and such a NEAT way to show inspiration! You have a gift!