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06/16/06
Good story. You drew me with a good lead, and kept me there to the end. Thanks.
06/17/06
Extremely gripping piece! Your transition from the breathless action of the race to the hospital room was superb! Great dialogue, too--I could feel the wife's grief, the cold bitterness of his trauma, revealing the emptiness that lurked there all along. Chilling finale, great writing!
06/19/06
Good story, weel told with a strong ending. Well done.
06/19/06
Your translation needs some working on, but otherwise this is a good story.
06/20/06
Enjoyed the story and the gripping emotion that coursed through it to the end.
06/21/06
Very well done, especially on Jorge's bitterness. Gripping story.
06/21/06
Excellent story. It was powerful and gripping. Thanks.