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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Escape (01/02/06)

TITLE: The Serpent at the Cross
By Linda Watson Owen


In the center of the cross of Calvary, time and eternity forever intersected. There hung the Son of God, Jesus Christ, bearing immeasurable pain of the body and of the spirit. Temptations surrounded Him throughout His perfect life and also now, as He was willingly dying on the torturous cross. No moment was as excruciating, however, as the moment God the Father withdrew. It is possible that at that time of total aloneness, Satan himself drew near and whispered into our Savior’s ear.

The Serpent at the Cross

why suffer so upon this savage cross?
The ones you suffer for
are only cursed dross.
Come down.
Come down.
Possess your kingdom here below.
Seize sovereignty,
and surely all will know
you are the one,
you are the son of god.
Why suffer so?
Why suffer so?

escape is in your grasp.
Just cash it in,
and you will last.
You will last
and hold the cosmos in your hand!
Escape the pain,
and here remain.
You’ll surely gain.
Just whisper now my name.

the storm is stealing near.
Look here.
Look here within my eyes.
Surely you realize
there is no need to suffer such distress.
It is not fit.
It is not fit
the son of god should shake ‘neath blood and spit.

listen well.
You deserve far more
than this suspended hell.
Say no.
Say no,
and you can make it so.
Don’t bear this shame.
Whisper my name,
and I, your savior, will remain.

open your eyes!
Assert your own desires,
and strike the skies!
Choose not this god’s path
who forsakes his son!
Die not!
Come down,
and worship Me,
the Only One!

“Your attitude should be the same that Christ Jesus had. Though he was God, he did not demand and cling to his rights as God. He made himself nothing; he took the humble position of a slave and appeared in human form. And in human form he obediently humbled himself even further by dying a criminal's death on a cross. Because of this, God raised him up to the heights of heaven and gave him a name that is above every other name, so that at the name of Jesus every knee will bow, in heaven and on earth and under the earth, and every tongue will confess that Jesus Christ is Lord, to the glory of God the Father.” Philippians 2:5-11 (NLT)

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Jan Ackerson 01/11/06
This poem leaves me in utter awe. Powerful, powerful, powerful. Thank you so much.
Sally Hanan01/12/06
Awesome Linda, as always. You manage to pack so much into such a little space, and the Holy Spirit shines through in power.
Pat Guy 01/12/06
Wow Linda! I could feel the hiss from Satan's lips! The vile pride! And Jesus' quiet strength and assurance in His Father! Wow!
Pat Guy 01/12/06
Linda - I meant I could 'hear' the hiss from ...! (great job) I didn't mean feel the hiss from ... - Gross! Love, Pat
Marilyn Schnepp 01/12/06
Evidently everybody knows the Author of this fantabulous piece! A person named Linda. I do not know the Author...but this is awesome! Absolutely, definitely and incredibly the most...I'm lost for words!
What can I say? A Winner for sure! I'm in awe, in absolute awe and speechless! Thank you, Thank you, Thank you! You've made writing an Artistic masterpeice!
Cassie Memmer01/12/06
Clever perspective. Very well done!
Dara Sorensen01/12/06
Amazing! The hissing serpent was very evident!
Lynda Lee Schab 01/13/06
There is power and beauty in your words. A work of art...magnificent!
Blessings, Lynda
Kris St. James01/13/06
When I first read this, I did not like the way you used repetition; it didn't fall in predictable places. I reread it a few days later and I felt very different. It worked. Very good poem, awesome image.
Suzanne R01/13/06
Ugh ... the images of the serpent hissing out his message absolutely reviles me ... which is praise for your writing, Linda!

I can see why you and your husband discussed this long and hard ... but anyhow, from an artistic point of view, I love it. I bet I know your husband's argument though ;-)

(I wimped out with my theologically knotty piece.)

WELL DONE!!!! (Even as I shudder thinking of those evil horrible suggestions.)
Laurie Glass 01/13/06
This is so clever - you always have such original ideas. Awesome piece - really makes you think.
Anita Neuman01/14/06
I love the repetition and the irregularity of the poem. It made me imagine the serpent weaving back and forth, whispering alternately in both of Jesus' ears. It sent shivers down my spine. And your opening paragraph sets the scene perfectly. Brilliant writing!
Val Clark01/16/06
Very well done, loved the poetry and the imagery. So close to other 'false promises' satan offers elsewhere in the scriptures. Yeggy
Beth Muehlhausen02/10/06
Somehow I envisioned Satan as depicted in Mel Gibson's "Passion of the Christ" saying this...without even trying. I see the voice, the eyes in my mind's eye.....this script could have been part of the movie!!!! Very graphic, dripping with evil. Good job, Linda!