The Official Writing Challenge
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08/22/13
Awwww. THis was lovely. I smiled and enjoyed your words in this beautiful story. Thank you.

God bless~
08/22/13
Such a lovely entry. You are obviously a wonderful Mother.

Your entry is well written, easy to read and full of love. I enjoyed it very much.

Thanks for sharing.
08/23/13
Beautiful writing--I can't find fault with anything here, and you certainly tapped into emotions very familiar to much of your audience.

My only critique would be to suggest that you experiment with adding conflict into your entry. Conflict doesn't have to involve sin or evil--simply a problem, however small, for the main character to overcome. Conflict draws in the reader, and is an essential part of a good short story, whether fiction or nonfiction.

Thanks for a sweet and serene entry.
08/28/13
Right on target as you exhale encouragement and prayer. I suspect with five marriages and more than a decade of years involved, there has been ample conflict but not yours to tell. Thanks for sharing.