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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Measure (01/10/13)

TITLE: There Once Was A Man...
By C D Swanson


"Daddy, read me another story," Alyssa pleaded while bouncing gently on her mattress.

"Sweetheart, I've already read you five stories..."

"Yeah, but the last one is always the best one. Please!"

Dennis sighed with a smile on his handsome face. He could never say no to his little pride and joy. "Okay, but this is the last one."

This scene was familiar to her mom watching from the hallway. Dennis, the devoted husband and doting dad she loved so much, always there for both of them.

"There once was a man who came to earth. This man loved us all so very much..."

"How much daddy?" Alyssa interrupted frequently, "how much?" she repeated.

"There's no way to measure it sweetheart. He loved us so much he gave his life for us so we could be free. He still loves us and always will. Do you remember his name my tater-tot?"

She smiled, then pointed upward before answering, "Uh-huh...Jesus."

"That's right. Jesus the Son of God, He's our friend, and our Savior."

"Daddy, does He know how much sand is in the beaches?"

"On the beaches...yes, He does. He knows the measure of all things."

She was satisfied with that answer and snuggled into the bed smiling, listening to her dad's words.

"His Father is our Father. You remember, the Father, the Son, and the Holy Spirit...all in one..."

"He looked down at his little angel who was fast asleep, the day finally caught up with her. He kissed her gently as he tucked her in.


"Mom? Mom, are you awake? I've come to visit you. How are you tonight?"

"Who are you?" Alyssa’s mom woke up from a pleasant dream, and peered intently at the pretty lady sitting on her bed in the nursing home. The dream was so nice, and felt real.

"Mom, it's me, your daughter Alyssa." She watched, hoping for some form of recognition, anything....unfortunately there was a vapid stare nothing more.

"Can you read me something, please? I'm so tired I just want to sleep... Please." She closed her eyes, never seeing the tears streaming down her daughter's face.

"Sure...I'll read something mom. She kissed her gently and began..."There once was a man who came to earth. This man loved us all so very much..."

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Barbara Lynn Culler01/17/13
Oh this is a tear-jerker! Thanks for sharing.
Linda Goergen01/17/13
I agree Barbara, this has so much emotion in it! I love the way the same story about Jesus’ love that comforted Alyssa—years and settings apart, she uses to comfort her mom. Indeed, how could we measure the comfort the story of Jesus has given to many over the years! Beautifully told story, great job.
John Huckstep01/20/13
One of my favorites---Timeless values taught in a well written story. Thanks for sharing this one.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/21/13
This is a bittersweet story. You grabbed my heart from the very beginning and kept my attention until the last word. You did a great job of writing on topic while delivering an important message. I know many people will be able to relate to this and in more than just one way. Great job on this well written story.
Noel Mitaxa 01/21/13
There is real power in the silent gap between the warm energetic interaction of your intro and the pain of your close, which is a very skilful bridge into the minds of your readers. Great work which should relate well.
Noel Mitaxa 01/21/13
Click pause and rewind... For "relate well," please substitute "rate well." Resume review.....
Dannie Hawley 01/22/13
Excellent job! I totally agree with the other commenters and congratulate you on a real winner. I just loved this entry!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/24/13
Congratulations on ranking 7th in level 3 and 37 overall!
Bonnie Bowden 01/26/13
This is such a tender and touching story. It brought tears to my eyes at the end. Even though the mother didn't recognize the daughter, the daughter still brought comfort into the mother's life.

Thank you for taking the time to read everyone's poems and stories. This means a lot to mean.

Emily Ritter02/04/13
The end is very surprising. Having worked in a nursing home, I can understand the feeling of the daughter, having seen it on many visiting children's faces. This is honest, and sad, but still hopeful.