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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: This Side of Paradise (not about the book) (07/14/11)

TITLE: Our Own Private Eden
By Deborah Ann Belka
07/20/11


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We live in our own private Eden,
where sin slithers on the ground
and climbs its way into the soul
so lust can flourish and abound.

Creeping around the heart's door,
is the pleasure for wordily things
crawling in, is self-centeredness
that this paradise so often brings.

Tempting as it may sound to some,
disobedience runs wildly amok
for in this self-made earthly heaven
one soon gets buried in the muck.

The tree to what is fine and good,
grows tall, lush, and is evergreen
producing fruit of different kinds
so wanton hearts can always glean.

A bite of this, a nip of that,
we all play around and quibble
but it doesn't make a difference
once we take that deadly nibble.

The quest for greed and knowledge
grows untamed in this private garden
we don't see our self-indulgence
until our hearts are cold and harden.

There is another side to this paradise,
that will one day come upon us all
and in this garden no foot shall slip
nor shall one soul take a fall.

So, until such time be aware,
of the private Eden you create
for the slithering one doesn't care
what fruit of his . . . you ate!


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Amica Joy 07/22/11
I like your poem a lot. Full of wisdom and well written!
Edmond Ng 07/24/11
Nicely written with a message so clear! I especially like the part about the other side of paradise which one day will come upon us and where no foot shall slip nor soul take a fall. May we all hearken to good advice and be aware of the slithering one who is always ready to ensnare us, especially if we unwittingly choose to build our own private Eden rather than follow closely the will of God.
Linda Goergen07/25/11
I enjoyed this poem - its message, rich with vision! And your last stanza ends with a punch of truth, Satan doesn’t care which sin he can get us to taste of, he’ll feed us our fill of any he can get us to succumb to! Nicely done!
Kim Hamlin07/27/11
"for in this self-made earthly heaven
one soon gets buried in the muck." Isn't that the truth?!! Great job and very well-written!
Noel Mitaxa 07/28/11
Strong and perceptive insights into the deceitfulness of sin and the loser who designs it. Well done.