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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: 24 Hours (01/27/11)

TITLE: Scars On My Heart
By Michael Joshua
02/01/11


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Just yesterday I had a good friend. Really, two good friends.

Someone I shared stories of home life, children, challenges, grandchildren. Someone that my oldest grandson just asked me about going to visit.

Calls him the 'Man that talks about the yellow lines.'

"Please, let's go by," he said, "I like those people up there." I replied, "Yes, they were all very nice to you, weren't they? But I don't work there anymore."

But somehow, something went terribly wrong.

Today I opened the envelope and found out that I had been betrayed. After a three year friendship – or what I thought was a friendship – it all turned to mush. I thought it was an innocent misunderstanding – the envelope proved I was wrong. It was a calculated move.

Do I know why?

No, I am at a complete loss.

Many times, I had been told that things were never as they seemed. But I thought I knew better. With all the trials we had shared and the family issues that came our way. With the freedom that we all enjoyed to speak our minds without it affecting our friendship. Notes from them thanking me for all I had done in three years stand as a testament to my heart.

Why would someone that I had worked to benefit and protect in many ways, personally, professionally and financially, turn on me?

It makes one wonder if putting yourself out there, getting to know someone, listening to their tales and sharing your own… is it really worth it?

So, discussions, plans for the future, investing myself into a relationship that falls apart in such a short time…what exactly does that mean?

How does it happen?

What brings us to such a place?

Yes, I'm hurt.

I am betrayed. But the worst part is that I don't know what brought it about.

I wish I had never opened the envelope.

I would rather not have known.

A day ago, they were still my friends. I keep telling myself that. I have no response so I will simply remain silent.

That changed - all in a twenty four hour period.

I'm not sure that my heart will bounce back from this one.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/06/11
My heart breaks for the MC. The pain is quite clear. I wish I knew more though. I'm longing to know how she w as betrayed and why and by whom.You did a great job eliciting all kinds of emotion from me.
Lollie Hofer 02/08/11
You did do a good job of expressing the pain felt by the mc. It would have been nice to know what was in the note but you might have done that on puprose as well...let me draw my own conclusions.
Laury Hubrich 02/08/11
Life is so very unfair. This reminds me of my daughter and something she just went through at her church. Heartbreaking.
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/09/11
The loss of a trusted friend is a grievous loss. You expressed it well.
Gregory Kane02/09/11
Part of the process of growing as Christians is learning to forgive the trespasses of others. No one ever said that it was easy!
Rachel Phelps02/09/11
As others have said, I felt the MC's pain, but would love to have known more. Really great voice!
Loren T. Lowery02/09/11
This is a sad story and you've told it well, but it still leaves the reader wondering what happened. Maybe that was intentional in that we must be wary in sharing our hearts.
Noel Mitaxa 02/09/11
I'm also puzzled over the cause, but so is your MC. This is a very credible portrait of what it feels to be betrayed; and the doubt about being able to rise above it is very honest. Yet rising above it is a gift of God's grace - humanly impossible - but an expensive preparation for being able to nourish others when they are also betrayed.