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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Year(s) (01/20/11)

TITLE: Letting Go
By Loren T. Lowery
01/26/11


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The past,
A weighted bindle
Yoked
Over
Burdened shoulders;
Its shadow
A bobbing bruise
Upon
Wearied backs.

Tiny bag
Troubling
Mans onward gait.

Eyes cast
Backward -
Thoughts following -
Traveler stumbling
On promised paths
Yet trod.

Souls wearied
By crab-like
Crawls -

Spirits torn
By scrabbling
Claws
Inching sideways.


Memory,
An ocean
Savored with
Salty air and
Seducing Sirens.

A mountebank
With white shadows
And glinting light
That flit and dart
Over her
Crushing waves.

Old Lang Syne
An enigma
Clothed in
Shimmering,
Silken skins.
A cold dagger
Of
Death
Hidden in its
Folds.

Yesterday,
An echo -
Sounds
Rebounding
Off voiceless
Shoals.

Days gone by,
A bijou -
Effigies
Flickering
Over empty
Screens.

Echoes and bijous
Sounds and effigies
Each a conceit of no substance.

Years past,
Naught but
Shadows of trees
Standing before us.

Furtive backward looks,
Hindered by time
and tangible substance.

Laden pilgrim
Unable to
See beyond the
Light cast upon
A ground.
A ground existent only to
Welcome and bury
The wayfarer
In its hardened soil.

Hope only seen
By forward turn of head -
Upwards -
Into the True Light
Through the boughs.

A future only found
By forgetfulness
And, letting go.


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Yvonne Blake 02/03/11
Interesting images and thoughts - well done!
Henry Clemmons02/03/11
Oh I like, I like, I like. This was a pure joy for me to read. I loved the voice, the rhythms, the internal and external rhymes, aliteration.... It was packed with poetic power and so very visual and enjoyable to read. As you can guess, I am a big fan of this sort of expression, especially when so artfully and soulfully delivered. Great job. Wow! Even better performed aloud. We can't always catch the judges ear, but for what little I know, this is stellar in my book.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/03/11
Congratulations for placing 11th in Masters and 11th overall!