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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Communication Breakdown (12/16/10)

TITLE: A Gilded Memory - Tarnished
By Colin Swann
12/18/10


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A gilded memory A star-lit beauty ...
A capturing ... An enrapturing ...
A Lover's dream!

That love has now slipped from my grasp.
The zenith of all my heights and hopes
Lowered ...
To nadir's depth ...
Now distant indifference.

Those binding bonds ...
Bodies twined ...
Eternal oneness ...
Thrust apart by chill and coldness.
Eternal promises sealed by lovers' lips
Forever severed by retracted love.

Existence
Belief of rekindled fire ...
Blind hearts to open and breathe again.
I shout an echo from afar
Through those same distant stars
An echo of my love.

Winged message ...
Fly ...
Reverberate my eternal love
To that doubting heart
Why do I now await in fear
Her bitter-sweet reply?

Faded dreams ...
Amidst clouded drooping heads ...
Flowered words ...
Became untruths.
Sworn promises ...
Long forgotten
That once we spoke but never knew.

Can hope stir passion that is dead?
Or faith revive my dreams again?
Can fervour win another day ...
What's carelessly been tossed away?

Will chance at last then ...
Spark a light ...
To brighten up my darkest night?


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Nancy Sullivan 12/24/10
Broken communication i.e. broken promises and the devastation left by both.
A beautiful poem with a sad reality. Great writing.
Cheryl Harrison 12/24/10
Faded dreams ...
Amidst clouded drooping heads ...
Flowered words ...
Became untruths.
Sworn promises ...
Long forgotten
That once we spoke but never knew.


Poetic description of failure to communicate. Great job!
Verna Cole Mitchell 12/27/10
The emotion in your poem shows such a deep sadness--nothing much unhappier than faded love and broken promises!
Sara Harricharan 12/29/10
This is very beautifully expressed-thanks for sharing, I enjoyed the read!
Sarah Heywood12/29/10
Beautiful, but so poignant and sad at the same time. Great, great job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/04/11
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and the top 20 overall!