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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Body Language (11/25/10)

TITLE: Penultimate Performance
By Colin Nielsen
11/27/10


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I wish I was a dancer
like the men and women I saw
the night a drunk took my freedom.
I wish I could spin and sway
imparting love and joy and grace.
My dark eyes restrain the tears.

I stare at ever-still legs
and yell and scream at God , 'Why me?'
Do your tears fall like summer rain
and your face thunder in rage
when one of your lost children sin
and cause unspeakable sorrow?

The dancers moved me to tears
that magical and horrid eve.
They spun a tale of loss and gain
and didn't say a single word.
I watched from my metal chair
as they ducked and weaved and loved.

I can not lift even one hand
to hold my wife ever again
and share with her my wordless love
or say, 'I'll always be there'
because she's with you in heaven
while I am prisoner on Earth.

In my pain you remain silent
but your body on earth, the church,
it spins and moves and prays for me.
I hear you speak by their actions,
you dance over the whole earth.
And I watch you move every day,
performing over desperate lives,
I know your body's language now
is love, almighty God of life.


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Troy Manning12/02/10
Very well-written & uplifting poem. Nice job!
Noel Mitaxa 12/02/10
Great how you have emphasised the role of the church as the body of Christ continuing Jesus' ministry in day to day - rather than dramatic ways. Very positive stuff!
Lollie Hofer 12/03/10
Great job of expressing his sorrow in this soulful poem. I'm glad the church was able to be Jesus to this man.
Cheryl Harrison 12/04/10
...but your body's language now is love...

Great way to portray God's body language. Keep writing!
Henry Clemmons12/05/10
a jarring, honest piece of literature. I liked the line about Jesus dancing above the whole church. And the church body's language being that of God. Well thought out and executed; touching and encouraging. A great metaphor to encourage all who feel paralized by life. Great job.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/05/10
Oh this is a touching piece. It brought a lump to my throat.
Patricia Turner12/05/10
I too got a lump in my throat at your MC's pain. Great job!
Rachel Phelps12/06/10
What a lovely take on the topic. Jarring, but a fabulous message.
Philippa Geaney 12/08/10
Raw, honest, hopefilled. Does one say well done to a cry like that? I do so in the context of a written piece. It also stirrs in me the knowledge of the trust Jesus puts in us the church to care for the wounded.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/09/10
Congratulations for placing 7th in your level and 20th overall!
Nancy Sullivan 12/09/10
Congratulations on your recognition for this powerful and well-deserved entry. Great job!