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I like spunky Natalie. Most teen girls would revel in another's problems. You had me on the edge of my chair wondering what her wacky plan was going to be. It was a refreshing YA read and I love that genre even though I'm about 20 years too old. Nice job.
10/22/10
I like how the MC was encouraging the two girls to talk things out. I was a little confused at the end, though, about the Canada trip - but even then, you kept the theme going.
10/22/10
I like how the MC was encouraging the two girls to talk things out. I was a little confused at the end, though, about the Canada trip - but even then, you kept the theme going.
10/24/10
This was cute. I liked it.

I was a bit confused; felt like I was missing some background information. But I got the overall idea, and liked it. :)

You captured the MC and her friend well.
10/24/10
Well, I could smell the cafeteria food and hear the buzz of conversations surrounding these girls. Great job with dialogue--that is, and always has been your forte, girl! Very realistic.
10/25/10
Good story line - trying to resolve someone else's problems while not seeing the one right at the end of her nose...that is, not communicating with her sibling about the Candadian trip until now and expecting her to jump without any questions. Whoops. Thanks for sharing.
10/25/10
Really good - the dialog and the action to make it come to life. Love your characters, and the ending didn't confuse me at all. :)
10/25/10
Oh the drama of highschool !
10/26/10
You had two separate dramas (is there a plural word for drama like drami? :) )going on at the same time. Your dialog is amazing! I actually was saying to myself. How does she do that?!?
Two thumbs up for the incredible dialogue and bringing the story to life.