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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Conversation (face to face) (10/07/10)

TITLE: Blindfolded?
By Sara Harricharan
10/15/10


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“They need to talk.” Natalie toyed with one of my steak fries. The crazy look in her eye meant I'd be in some sort of trouble fairly soon.

“Who?” I tried to distract her by moving the ketchup container. She didn't even blink.

“Don't, I need that.” She snatched another fat fry. “I'm serious. They haven't spoken for over a week, it's killing me.”

“It's none of your business.” I moved the ketchup cup back. She automatically dunked the latest fry.

“We're supposed to maintain the pleasant atmosphere of Morian High. Right now, it’s very unpleasant. It’s our business.”

“Do we want to?”

“Of course we want to.” She swiped another fry.

I gave up and pushed the plate of fries over. I couldn’t sit calmly and eat them knowing they were giving birth to the ridiculous idea that my best friend was about to announce.

She shot to her feet. “Got it!”

I grabbed the tray away as she pounded on the table. “Sit!”

“Blindfolds!” She sat.

“Blindfolds?” I handed her a napkin. She absently wiped her fingers on the square of paper. “Nat, I don't want to know. Can’t you-”

“I don't want anyone but you, Megs.” She wrinkled her nose. “Fries?”

My stomach silently protested as I shook my head.

She munched away as I debated the finer points of my fate in regards to her exclamation. The Unrelated Twins were Hima and Tory, best friends of a similar caliber in comparison to myself and Natalie.

Well, probably a higher caliber. They never get into the ridiculous situations Natalie lived for. They tended to avoid troublesome things with poise and dignity.

I would've settled for just the dignity.

Natalie chattered away about her plan and because she was the student council president, I knew she'd have the leverage needed to pull off such a ridiculous stunt.

“What if they don't want to talk to each other?”

“What if they do?” She countered.

“You don't know that.”

“Do I need to know that?”

“Natalie!”

“What? Look, they're popular girls and always involved in stuff that makes my life easier.” She tucked her bangs to the side, leveling snappy blue eyes at me. “They’re affecting the well being of the student body by allowing their personal issues to interfere with their social duties. I won't stand for that, Meg. You know what I'm talking about. I've already gotten complaints and I need it taken care of before this weekend.”

“Why? What’s happening-?”

“Dad's taking me to Niagara Falls and I don't want to spend my mini vacation thinking about pointless distractions when I could be dreaming of souvenirs and-”

“You never told me you were going to Canada.”

“Focus, Megan.” She said, patiently. “Now is not the time. I'll get Tory, you get Hima.” She checked her watch. “I'll excuse us both from biology, Mr. Tearbaum won’t have a problem. Go!”

Because she didn’t give any other choices, I did.

I found Hima in sniffling in the girls’ bathroom while trying to reapply mascara. I insisted she follow me to the cafeteria.

Natalie was waiting for us at the entrance. “Turn around and close your eyes.” She ordered, drawing out a thick, navy blue bandana. “Not you, Megs. Hima. Turn around and close your eyes. I don't want to hear any complaints.”

I guess it was Nat’s matter-of-fact way of handling things that helped, because the Hima quit whining, shut up, turned around and let herself be blindfolded.

When that was through, Natalie led her along the maze of tables and chairs to sit at a table opposite a blindfolded Tory.

I nearly choked.

Natalie stomped on my foot for good measure. I covered my mouth with one hand. Natalie cleared her throat, rattling off a speech about kindness, goodness and forgiveness. I didn't understand any of it. But it ended with a direct “order” for both parties to apologize and resume official duties.

“Whatever your problems are, keep them out of your school life. People depend on you. Don’t forget that. You’re mature enough to handle this on your own.”

The blindfolds were removed and somehow, they talked.

I watched them from our corner. “Canada?”

“Yeah. Dad will pick you up at eight.”

“WHAT?”

“Don’t you wanna go?”

“That’s not the point!”

“And the point is…?”

I pinched my nose and counted to ten. “Nat, we really need to talk.”

“About what?”

“Talk.” I repeated, looping an arm around her neck. “Like now.”


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/22/10
I like spunky Natalie. Most teen girls would revel in another's problems. You had me on the edge of my chair wondering what her wacky plan was going to be. It was a refreshing YA read and I love that genre even though I'm about 20 years too old. Nice job.
Laury Hubrich 10/22/10
I like how the MC was encouraging the two girls to talk things out. I was a little confused at the end, though, about the Canada trip - but even then, you kept the theme going.
Laury Hubrich 10/22/10
I like how the MC was encouraging the two girls to talk things out. I was a little confused at the end, though, about the Canada trip - but even then, you kept the theme going.
Allison Egley 10/24/10
This was cute. I liked it.

I was a bit confused; felt like I was missing some background information. But I got the overall idea, and liked it. :)

You captured the MC and her friend well.
Dee Yoder 10/24/10
Well, I could smell the cafeteria food and hear the buzz of conversations surrounding these girls. Great job with dialogue--that is, and always has been your forte, girl! Very realistic.
Lollie Hofer 10/25/10
Good story line - trying to resolve someone else's problems while not seeing the one right at the end of her nose...that is, not communicating with her sibling about the Candadian trip until now and expecting her to jump without any questions. Whoops. Thanks for sharing.
Catrina Bradley 10/25/10
Really good - the dialog and the action to make it come to life. Love your characters, and the ending didn't confuse me at all. :)
Yvonne Blake 10/25/10
Oh the drama of highschool !
Beth LaBuff 10/26/10
You had two separate dramas (is there a plural word for drama like drami? :) )going on at the same time. Your dialog is amazing! I actually was saying to myself. How does she do that?!?
Loren T. Lowery10/27/10
Two thumbs up for the incredible dialogue and bringing the story to life.