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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: See (07/22/10)

TITLE: Tunnel Vision
By Colin Swann
07/26/10


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A cavern's gloom alerts my eye
To darkened views behind;
Then panic twists it back again,
To seek a way to find
A way along the jagged rocks,
To life's hope's second chance.
It's there ahead, but wane and woe,
Have left a crippled dance.

My shaky limbs and dimming sight
Do blight the targets view,
From winning through another day,
And teeter to the new;
But strength sucked dry by leeches' life,
Does thwart me of my might.
But beckoned on that warren long
I'll fight that darkest night.

Then peering back at years gone by,
To youth's eternal whims,
I took my eye well off the goal
And missed the worthwhile things;
Eternal hope in embers now,
Just holding off its death,
One day I hope to run again,
To have a skipper's breath.

My faith grasps out for budding time,
To play again that morn;
Yet all the fruiting of the branch,
Aborted, as unborn;
Shall phoenix then shake off that dust
To lift me from the flame,
And chains wrapped round my wounded breast,
Give way to life again?


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Caitlyn Meissner07/30/10
How thankful I am that Jesus frees us from those chains and gives us life! Thank you for this poem.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/31/10
Wow very emotional and powerful words.
Brenda Shipman08/01/10
Great title, and wonderful description of the oftentimes difficult and painful journey through life. Loved the honesty and transparency in this entry. I also liked how you didn't wrap it up all nice & tidy-like as you closed the poem, but ended it with a question. Praise God that YES! God does bring about many resurrections in our lives and sets us free again and again - from bondage to sin, discouragement, depression...and draws us out of the ashers. Bless you as you continue to write, so that others may find life!
Brenda Shipman08/01/10
oops, meant ashes, not ashers!
wendell brown 08/02/10
A beautiful poem saying so much about lost hope, new hope, second chances, praying that perhaps the cries would touch His ear.
One that touches the spirit
deeply.
Laury Hubrich 08/02/10
I can relate to tunnel vision, that's for sure. Very nice poem.
Laury Hubrich 08/02/10
I can relate to tunnel vision, that's for sure. Very nice poem.
AnneRene' Capp 08/02/10
Wow...this is excellent. You escorted me on a journey into an abyss of terror (a life apart from God) and then lifted me out of the despair with the wonderful message of second chances.
Mariane Holbrook08/04/10
Touching, emotional, compelling. You've got it all with this entry. Kudos !
Lollie Hofer 08/04/10
I like the natural flow of the poem. It almost has a "King James" sound in some of the words but without forcing them. (I hope that made sense.) Great message as well.
Mona Purvis08/04/10
What a thought-provoking message in perfect rhyme. I can't get over the line 'and missed the worthwhile things'. Sometimes, that's where I let my thoughts go. Back to a past where I wish I had made better choices.
Haunting and so very well written.

Mona
Edmond Ng 08/04/10
Nicely written piece that speaks to the heart. Shows clearly where we stand before and after in leaving behind our wounded past to give way to life and a brighter future.