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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Critique/Review (for writers) (05/06/10)

TITLE: Me Thinks it Stinks!
By Deborah Ann Belka
05/12/10


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I sit at my old computer,
and type out a line or two.
Then I hit the backspace button,
and start on this poem anew.

I look into the book of thesaurus,
to find a word that will brightly shine.
Then I enter it into this telling poem,
but still canít make it rhyme.

I read the Bible for inspiration,
until I find a stirring verse.
Then I inserted it on my poetry page,
but it only makes the rhyming worse.

I think about the day before me,
the beauty of God is all around.
Then I carve a picture with my words,
but the timing needs to be whittled down.

I thought about the night before,
and I wrote about that one falling star.
Then it looked like this poem came alive,
but the meter seemed like a sleeping car.

I go online to the rhyming site,
and look to see what words will match.
Then it searches for all the variations,
but there are no rhymes for me to hatch.

I try to come up with the correct form,
and I think and think and think.
Then I put my thoughts down on paper,
but me thinks this poem will stink.

I am my own worst foe and critic,
and I need a poetry trouble shooter.
I know the reason I canít find any rhymes,
is that there are none left in this computer!


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Benjamin Graber05/13/10
LOL! Way to use rhymes for bringing out humor!
Sara Harricharan 05/14/10
Heehee...this sounds like someone I know. I love the title and the rhyme to it. Cute!
Amanda Brogan05/17/10
HaHa! I know what it's like to be my own worst critic. ;) But despite my doubts, I've learned to keep working on stuff even when I think it stinks, and sometimes it turns out to be something that everyone (or most everyone) likes!

Like this poem for instance. . . great rhyme and meter throughout! And it perfectly portrays the frustration that comes when a writer just can't find the right words.

So in summary . . . great job on this non-stinky poem! ;)