The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, I really like some of the pictures you used here. "Spinning a tale for weeks or months must lead/the reader on a journey for the soul to feed" - that is perfect! Inspiring, encouraging words - thank you!
You used a difficult rhyming scheme, and did well with it, but by the end some of the rhymes felt a little forced. You might want to watch for that next time.
I really like this poem, especially the first stanza. Great job!
05/15/10
Nice thoughts, but poem is "pitchy"; doesn't read smoothly or flow well. Nice job, however, on topic.
05/16/10
Very effective in communicating our need for READERS to actually read, and then offer advice on our work. You described the desire of each of us! (teensy note - don't think besook is a word, is it? did you mean forsake? but then it wouldn't rhyme, unless you changed the wording and said "forsook" - sorry!)
Thanks for the comments everyone. Thank you Brenda for pointing out my mistake about "besook". I should have looked it up first. My intended definition is the same as "forsook", so I should have used that word instead. Maybe I had a mind scramble. Thanks.